All Comments on 'Long Wanted'

There's a lot of story to be told yet, and in my mind there could be a lot of different avenues the story could take. I would love to see for them to get Mom involved. Have him fucking both mom and sis, but totally in love with sis. The only reason he's fucking mom is dad can't cut it any more and sis feels sorry for mom...... At least thats what I would like to see. Thanks for the good story

You could have wrapper this story up in one paragraph, so he fucks he's sister end of story, try and think of something inventive.

Pay no attention to the previous comment. Every erotic story can be reduced to 'people have sex, end of story.' You wrote about feelings, you had some build up, and finally they had sex. However, the ending was rather abrupt; does that mean there will be another installment in this story?

Contrary to the previous comment, don't get mother involved. Incest is taboo; when Mom is involved and it becomes more accepted, you lose some of the thrill. Maintain the thrill by putting them in positions where they might be discovered. Fast forward a few years and put them in college, sharing an apartment.

Above all, keep writing and express yourself.

Ehh, had to pick a rating, lol.

Thank you for the comments, however I will not be including the mother in the next chapters. While I do enjoy the though of Incest, mother/son really turns me off. I wrote this for a close friend of mine so some of its events are at her whim, haha.

I do realize this is shorter than I would have preferred, but the girl I wrote it for rushed me to finish it so towards the end it started to get more summed up with less details. I intend to keep them both under the parents household for awhile because it adds to the idea of possibly getting caught. Despite any comments, I will be continuing this story, though it may take awhile because I am a rather slow writer.

Chester, my kid knew the difference between 'your' and 'you're' by the seventh grade. You could learn it too. You need an editor. It would be good if the editor pointed out to you the extreme unbelievability of a teenager with Double-D breasts.

to unrealistic for me no way they are going to be fighting and mad as hell then the next day be all lovie dovie it goes against human nature maybe after a week more like a month people do not forgive that easy keep it realistic and believable from now on

But, I hope you tell us the rest of the story someday.