All Comments on 'Lost Bet 06: Didn't See That Coming'

So badly written and such a poor plot, bland story and dreadful grammar.

I second the previous comment. Show some pride in your writing. Edit for fucks sake or get someone to do it. It is appalling. Not one of the characters are worth reading about, noting but immature children.

Your comments have been read and I understand, I'll do better for the next story, I thank you for another chance.