All Comments on 'Lost Empire Ch. 10'

I like this and look forward to more

Keep up the great work

I have been reading from the first day and just keep getting better. But shouldn't this be in the Sci-fi section?

How older Derrick on Darius 3 and the younger Derrick on Shelby and Zan, was occupying the time line at the same time?

Enjoying the teasers...surprises...direction this tall tale is taking. Thanks...and as before...keep 'em coming!

An example of role reversal

Exhibited by humility.

Nicely played

I have to wonder why the IMT did not come into play to get Derrick out of space as the explosion happened. If it was not possible to use the IMT, because you as the author wanted it to go this way obviously, you should have included why the IMT was not possible. Especially since the ships can IMT pretty great distances, including from orbit onto a planet. As I read it I got more and more frustrated why Shelby didn't just IMT him in. I have to think I was not the only one upset there was no explanation. This is a great story, and worthy of being a full published novel, but small overlooks like this are big potholes to a reader. Seriously though, you've got a really good story here.

Pledging themselves constantly is monotonous.

4* plot is really good, delivered with imagination. However, time-lines in the story are not consistent and a little confusing.

Your chapter's r mind blowing, but please if you are adding them after gap of 1-2 months please At least have them 4-5 pages, so that they have some texture.

Nanites are nanomites in the future and holograms cry? There’s a juvenile quality to the writing reminiscent of Flash Gordon and Buck Rodgers, but without the visual benefit of Dale Arden and Wilma Deering. If that irritating robot twat Tweekie turns up I’m out.

To Purplefizz: "Be dee, be dee, be dee, What the fuck, Buck?" Juvenile quality confirmed. Story requires a line by line edit. Crikey, I've got 75 more chapters to endure??

Anon56

there's something like wet bread about this story.. it feels flooded with estrogen.. would have made more sense to have an empress than an emperor as a main character..