All Comments on 'Lost Empire Ch. 70'

good to have you back please keep it up

I love the story, can't wait for more!!!

Great read as always would love to see this being published as physical books would make for a great collection

Keep going, You are doing WELL!!!

Loved it please keep em coming.

I have always been fascinated with your story. Keep it up.

"“MOTHER!” The excited female voice almost shouted."

Dialogue in all caps, ending w- an exclamation point would, in fact, BE shouting. Not almost shouting.

Words matter. The written word has the purpose of communication. If the written would does not communicate fully or accurately, it fails it's purpose.

'Almost' is an adverb used to indicate the verb it is modifying does not fully attain the verb's meaning. In this case, the dialogue DOES attain the verb's meaning, making 'almost' superfluous

I had an 8th grade English teacher who would have reamed you for superfluous use of words. She was a loud, tall & buxom blonder from St Louis, who would remind you everytime, "It is pronounced, 'Saint Louie', NEVER, 'Saint Loo-us!", and she would, in fact, shout it, as well.

She hated superfluous word usage as much as she loved her St Louis heritage. In this case, either drop the almost as unneeded, or change 'shouted' to an exaggeration, so the limiting adverb, almost, can have a purpose.

Sometimes, the art of wordsmithing IS just that logical, at other times, no chance.

'Write what you mean, mean what you write, and make sure your words' meanings make it all right.

Emperor Kandra takes one look at Tempro and nearly pees himself. Wow.

Seriously. Most characters in this series seem to have major mental instability problems. They're either yelling, or crying, or being so petty and child-like that it distracts terribly from the story.