All Comments on 'Lost Empire Ch. 72'

Thank You!

You had me captivated at chapter 1

Your imagination is absolutely phenomenal but you really need an editor, BADLY! You seem to still be horribly allergic to using any punctuation besides periods, your constant use of the words his self (it’s himself), their self (it’s themselves), separating some words into two words (example: words like upbeat you write as up beat) and more makes me want to whack you upside the head with a Roget’s Thesaurus! I still love your stories, no matter the spelling, punctuation and wording missteps because you’re a damned phenomenal writer!

This story just keeps getting deeper. The deeper it goes, the better it gets.

Are you going to write more? I hope so

"The A.I. was passed two terabytes."

passed » past

or

was passed » passed

That last line sounds similar to the ancient Klingon war cry "Perhaps today IS a good day to die". I like it!