All Comments on 'Lottery dreams'

Good one.

Very original, believable and innovative.

Well written

4/5

How is this a loving wife.

Don't live in misery!

4

Just perfect..!! No more needs to be added.

Brilliant. I have composed my own chapter two in my mind and it's great fun. I hope others enjoy a similar exercise. Thank you.

Nice

That last line was priceless.

Very good. Part two please.

Wow...nice job!!! I can't remember another story like it. BH-BC

NOT A STORY 1 STAR

Whoa! That was a tight little story. The venom was readily apparent, though the characters couldn’t be well developed in so few words. That was just fine for this slice of life. It’s fun to think about where the MC’s marriage would go next.

51st way to leave your (former) lover. Nice.

Awesome Story

Lol. Now that was funny

Nice to see him stand up for himself. Thanks!

Do the wife’s reaction in your next short. Nice story.

Rolling on the floor laughing! Game, set and match to him!

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brilliant story thanks

Ouch

Original and amusing take, 4 stars

I'm left wanting some reaction or response from the wife

This gets one of the extremely rare 5* ratings from me. I give a lot of 4* ratings but, unlike some folks, I don't hand out 5* ratings like they were bulk bought Halloween candy.

Nicely explained!!!

LOVE slap-hapy-papy #9

Oh I suspect there’sca few out there who feel just like that

5* -- to the sound of applause!!!

5* -- to the sound of applause!!!

Sounds like my life at 70.

End a paragraph or so too soon.

Lol that was funny as f#%+*

Fun short.

Could have saved the sex scenes in front of his children... gross!

Well done and enjoyed. Thanks

Thank you all for commenting. Just to be clear, there is not, and never will be, a part two. I just wanted to write a tight little short story about pushing a man too far, and any attempt to extend it would, inevitably, be a pale shadow. Would Lynne change, would she walk out, would they win the jackpot the following week? Because I deliberately kept the character descriptions to a minimum, even I have no clue how the rest of their afternoon went. Though I suspect it was awkward.

My thanks again for reading and taking thevtime to comment.

Excellent, as far as it went. Why not let Lynne respond, we've heard only His side of the relationship? It would be a sequel, as this short was complete as is. The macho writers could portray Lynne distraught and full of remorse, while others could portray Lynne as welcoming release from a dull and now pointless relationship. They could both be better off. They might even have their "greener grass" flings and then rediscover their original love and respect. Just a thought. I thought this one was well done. Thanks for the effort.

Not nearly as good a story as the commenters here think. His anger and disgust at his wife made him put his children and their spouses in a very awkward place. Such a well crafted speech directed at his wife, who he can't stand, should have been in private. And, get a divorce already.

Neat story, thank you, she took it one step too far . . .

Funny but incomplete - 4*

So begging for a follow up, but alas it is not to be. I hope he just gets divorced and moves on

Oops...

So funny! I've done the dreaming and the living apart, just need to pull the trigger now.

I never had a speech like that in front of my kids, but then I didn't put up with the disrespect that he did for 10 years, nor did my ex force me into a corner in front of my kids and their SO.

So I say to @Frank66, the wife forced it, he gave her the get out but she pushed and pushed, she either wanted it in front of the kids or she was too stupid to realise. Even the kids tried to change her direction, but she wouldn't have it.

That was perfect. Since his dream had a pot split 6 ways, he wouldn’t have to pay her any support. Finally standing up for himself probably regained some of his children’s respect.

One should be careful when demanding a response to a question you think will get the obvious reply. It is possible that the world as you know it isn't the one the other person lives in.

Arch. Funny. An original idea among a plethora of same-same

OMG! Brilliant!

Well done. Not what I expected.

Very original flash story. *****

YES!!!!!! Feel the same way.

No follow-up needed, this is a perfect little freeze frame of an unhappy marriage on its way to the breaker's yard.

Thanks.

In your face bitch!!! What now? Great story that made me laugh.

Love it😂 I bet he got “ the silent treatment” for the next week😅😂

Wow! Loved it! Unusual way to let everyone know your marriage has ended.

Goosebumpgiver I think the silent treatment would be a reward. Dump her a go be happy.

Just asking!

There are times when you just shouldn't ask questions when you don't already know the answer!

Awesome!

Bravo

"I'd spend time finding someone who appreciated me and wanted me, whether she was immediately to hand, or elsewhere. Why do you ask?"

I would hope MC would say that, but, that is a different story. MC considers his wife unsalvageable, 'tis a shame.

This story was good, thanks for writing it.

That was chilling, but I do understand his position perfectly.

Awesome, but Damn I want to hear the fallout lol

Ouch!! 😂😂

That was fun .

Some people seem to revel in being miserable . Picking out the perceived flaws in others makes them even more miserable . They can't see it .

Good short story , but I would like to see a follow up in some firm or another .

Thanks for posting .

DK . 4 *

Great short story with a sting.

😁😁😁😁😁😁

She asked for it and she got it! Love it!

Excellent. Thanks.

A nice little big ette. Five stars.

JPB

"I have dreams too."

Out-f-ing-standing ! Bonus stars for you, my friend.

Kind of a line-in-the-sand moment. Hard to see the relationship staying the same after that.

Looking forward to your next one. JM

This story is like the most luxurious hotels in the world where no star rating can describe their grandeur. Well done 10 stars for you. Looking forward to the real response once the lottery has been won....

Just had to read this a second time.

Great story!

2nd read: Oh how we husbands can dream, fantasize, and wish!!!

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But, if the kids won - would they give dad 1/6th knowing he'd dump their bitch of a mother?

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10********** Hooyah, Salutes and wishes!

What he said was, FU

Sort of makes you wonder where the conversation went after his response, hey!

Wow!! That was different. I LOVED IT!! 5*

This story could have been so much better if you just continued on..

yeah that had the makings of a good solid story.

Oh, this shorty begs for a second part.