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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Great start

Looking forward to the next chapter!

minxxxkittenminxxxkittenalmost 6 years ago
Interesting start!

I’m definitely intrigued! Small critique is that Prince/Queen/King should be capitalized because they are titles, and maybe you could label who’s POV it is when the POV changes. Just small things! Other than that, great start. I can’t wait for the next chapter!!

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