by TheLadyWolf
You have left this story at a perfect place for chapter 2 and 3 and 4 and etc. If you don't write more I will be forced to kill myself by hitting myself over the head with a large brick.
with a line like, "I'm a adopted"?!
actually, because at that moment the description of the tent was very funny, so even if the "I'm adopted" line, if he had gone on to quip: "I wish you were" ---- it would have been a bigger laugh! lol
...but how can it be incest if one person is adopted? Still, your words created some very nice visuals for me, especially her long red hair!
Does she get pregnant? Do they marry? If she is adopted, her parents shouldn't care...unless she LIED TO GET INTO HIS PANTS!!! lol Great job!
I enjoyed the erotic images very much. The story was wonderfully written. But I do hope she is not really adopted.
a writer that can't keep track of what they write, first she has on a burgundy shirt then it turns into a black one WHICH IS IT? THIS IS WHY READERS KEEP SAYING USE A GOOD EDITOR BEFORE POSTING.