All Comments on 'Love Pill Ch. 02'

So it's hard for me to give my thoughts in a way I think is effective but I will try.

The biggest negative is how wimpy the main character is. I get what you're trying to do but I think there needs to be a bit of balance when it comes to developing a character like this.

I get it you want him to be a bit on the pathetic side so when he gets the girl. it's the whole nerd revenge trope. Unfortunately the character is so uninteresting, weak and pathetic the reader has an hard time wanting to root for him.

Now if this is like a male sub fantasy or something like that I would recommend adding that tag to the story. Otherwise at this rate I can't say I be interested with how little I care to see the main character win. Just being honest

4 stars for me because the writing is still good overall.

Aaron is too wimpy to be likeable and Ava is too big a cunt to be likeable. Story felt unfinished. Hope you can fix all that in the next chapter but Ava particularly will be a big challenge for you to rehabilitate.

Thanks for reading.

No more chapters will be posted. As of this comment, there are 11 chapters up with the 12th a WIP. You can purchase them on Smashwords. Link in my profile.

Thank you :)

Hate the fact there will be no more chapters posted here on Lit. The story just began to have my interest, only to be tossed to the curb with that statement. It's too bad you only wetted my interest. If you had hooked my interest, I might have conceded to making the purchases you waved in our faces. Too little, too soon. Lost me.

Are you gonna post more stories of Retraining Mom?

what a wimp, how is this have male dom tag?

another pussy on the pedestal

Both your slut sisters deserve to rot in hell