All Comments on 'Loving Siblings'

Well written especially for a first attempt.

a lot of wrong words and the plot was not very good and way to rushed. best thing to do is delete and run it through a good editor then repost and always use a good editor from now on.

Laughed when reading the first two posts with their differences in opinion, both by Anon posters. From the one who said it was not very good, they should have used an editor to edit their comments.

Anyway, it was good for a first time story and I'm sure your writing will get better over time. I look forward to reading chapter two, "The Further Adventures of Loving Siblings."

The anom has no sense of what to comment on. Anom should take their own advise and edit and delete anything they have to comment on as I don't see anything they have submitted or a name only anom. I think for a first story you did a great job. You should keep writing and add a few more ch to this story. Please pay no attention to the negative anom as they hate all new writers. You can tell by the way their comment is written they in fact have zero talent and are very jealous of any that do

I think you should make a part to and have the mother in it with them actually having sex

I liked the idea of you making the features of each sibling different. Normally you get two hotties or two uglies. Well done cute funny and add a part where there is a threesome!!! :)

Good start of what could be a great story if you would have finished the story and not left us hanging, I hate tease stories they are like prick teasing girls leaving you unsatisfied.

For a first timer this was pretty good. You left off at the end where Mom says to "make room for me".......thats a good place to start off the next chapter. Some people said you should have just continued it, and put in that part, however, being a first timer and wanting feedback I don't see any problem leaving it there.....getting your feedback, and deciding whether or not to continue. You should definately continue.......can't wait to see what you've got locked up in that head of yours.

OK, I had to register just so I could know when part 2 comes out......so, now I'm not so anonymous, LoL.

...have a part 2. It's a good story the way it is.

Refreshingly different.

It presents the life long depth that makes sibling love so enduring.

This story is fine ending as it does with a thread for the readers' imaginations to take them wherever they desire.

This story is fine ending as it does with a thread the author can use to expand into a very exciting series.

Thus this story works both ways ... I happen to like stories that do this.

Thanks for sharing and writing.

I liked the story but there were a couple typos, plus it was distracting that the first page was italicized. Work on that next time, other than that good story.

i think the outher people covered all the improvements but PLZ ADD A PART 2

I loved the story a lot it was very well written. Different from anything else I've read on here. But there were quite a few typos just take your time and I know you could fix that. I didn't care for the ending though. I am much more turned on by just the sibling aspect than having the mother be added in. A part two would be nice as well :)

great story but is there a part 2?

in your stories and delete edit and expand the plot then repost and always use a good editor before posting a story. this could also use a second chapter to finish it off after all half a story ( and this is less than half ) is worse than no story at all.

Keep mom out of it - at least until after their first time or two.

In thinking about your being a new writer, I would suggest some character development to make your story more believable. I enjoyed it though, and thought it was a good beginning to your writing career on Literotica.

It's just awesome but where's part 2

I love both your stories, wish they were a bit longer though. You write very well. Please write more and follow up on both your stories . Thanks