All Comments on 'Luckiest Guy I Know Ch. 01'

Another excellent story Mary, 5+ Stars! Can't wait for another chapter.

Great potential keep it going.

Really enjoying it

Thanks for sharing

Nicely done, but there are more than a few times where unclear wording pulled me out of the story.

Example:

"When she reached the end I, instinctively, flicked my tongue on it and, brown eyes alight, moved the thumb back across my lips, leaving a trail of moisture behind."

I think you might have meant something such as "...and SHE, HER brown eyes alight...", but I had to read the passage a few times before I figured that out.

You might find that a final read-through of a piece, aloud, can help you to notice things like this.

-Rei

with Viki and Mom and then Viki and Sandy

Love your stories, please keep them coming!!

well... I like it but I sense Viki cheating on him with sandy the step mom and we all know she wants his mm if she hasn't already slept with her.

So she's going to cheat on him with his mom and step mom. He's going to find out and also have sex with his mom and step mom because all people think lesbian sex is hot and sexy. While monogamy isn't.

I like where this is going, but the pace is a bit fast. I'll keep reading of course, but I hope the next chapter feels a little less rushed. Thanks!

Viki came on more like a MILF than a similar aged friend. The relationship won't last, even without the latter characters, ie Dad and Sandy. Good initiation for a young virgin though.

I love your stories, many thanks for making the effort.

Kind regards from England.

Looking forward to this story continuing on great story so far

She kissed my check!!