by Rollinbones
Sad but good story, sir. Respectfully, I think this story might be better situated in non-sexual, but it is indeed a romance of sorts. Well written; I'm sorry you didn't earn a paycheck for it.
Keep on keepin' on, man.
Interesting. Fast paced. You have to really concentrate or you'll get mixed up. In the future if you're going to set a story in the US please get the terminology and euphanims correct, us wrench-turners on old cars get a bit cranky.
I have no idea what this was about and haven't the time or interest to read it again to figure it out. The jargon was a major obstacle. Obviously a few people did figure it out - more power to them. 2*
I’ve always smirked to myself when reading comments on this one. I actually set it in 1970’s Melbourne Australia. The speech was how I remembered uncles and their girlfriends talking when I was a child. It’s tragic of course which doesn’t garner points in the popularity contest of things but it’s what I was given and it’s free.