All Comments on 'Lynn and Jake'

bit confusing but I enjoyed thoroughly--Thank you

Specifically, DON'T place quotation marks around every sentence.<P>

For example<P>

"Oh, Daddy, sighed Lynn." "Does this have to change things for us." "After all no-one around here knows that we are related." "We could just pretend to carry on as we are now." "I don't want to lose you again."<P>

should have been<P>

"Oh, Daddy," sighed Lynn."Does this have to change things for us? After all no-one around here knows that we are related. We could just pretend to carry on as we are now. I don't want to lose you again."<P>

Also, questions require question marks.

A good story Jena. A bit contrived but well put together. I've got to wonder if a father would almost sexually assault his newly found daughter. If they had lived together for a long time, I could see the sexual tension build between them. But, to know that she's his daughter, it seems more just lust than the love we all hope is the main factor in incest. Oh, by the way. Wish you'd use some of those "nasty" words. A pretty and sexy girl like you should be nasty and dirty when she is writing and touching her pussy. Thank you pretty lady, loved stroking my cock as I looked at your photo and read your stories.

Well done. Thanks for your submissions. They make for an easy read.

they are always fun and loving -and well written. i just wish you'd write again. i'm almost done reading all your posted work. 5 stars - and hope for more!