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by Rockwell

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AnonymousAnonymousover 19 years ago
Great story but.....

This story has so much potential but the flow is interrupted continually by the syntax errors that could easily be fixed by editing the story.

Read through the story out loud before you submit it and if a word sounds wrong then change it!

Good effort though!

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