All Comments on 'Maid to Order Ch. 01'

Interesting plot but why is it in 2 person ?

Cliffhanger ... Argh ! 5 stars but give us some Sexxxxxx!

Looking forward to where the story goes.

You have no idea how much it means that you've come back to us and are sharing so much! Love where its going and the SPOV. Only thing was that I thought it was set in an older time until the MP5 and the phantom and the helicopter.

Such a shame it was written in second person. Waste of a potentially good story.

Oh man I can’t wait for more!

Your words give me vivid and pleasant halluciantions, allow me to encourage you in continuing to write more of them. Especially if they are about mercenary maids.

To have 4 unassuming Women be hired as staff for Rich Royal Duke and Duchess and there Son,only to find out they are Mercenaries who plan to kidnap the Son,for who knows what,maybe ransom maybe worse.But honestly this story is 10 types of weird.

Right now I am not passing judgement until we find out what happens in later chapters,but alas this story needs another chapter ASAP so we know what the whole outcome is.

Not sure why this was rated so low. I can’t wait for more

Tantalizing first chapter. Second person is hard to pull off, but I think you did an exemplary job of it. Hope you are soon inspired to add more.

Can't wait for the next chapter! <3

Desperately waiting for part 2 👉👈

More please?

This is a good set up chapter, any chance of another chapter anytime soon?

Yes, it’s the beginning of a great story!

It’s so easy to get caught up in the worlds presented here on Lit, that I need to remind myself that life presents unexpected obstacles to each of us, at times diverting us from the path we may have intended to trek. I wish the author every good fortune and hope his path crosses here again one day, life and time permitting.

For a Young Duke to be entwined in a plot by 4 Mercenary Women for them to kidnap him and be handed over to rebels possibly as a ransom hostage for money is just idiocy on the 4 Women's part,and for Prinzessin Annemarie to show up and possibly thwart them from taking her perspective Husband-To-Be is just fool-hearty for the 4 Merc Women if they think they can escape for long.I just think Prinzessin Annemarie should locate them from that helicopter that was described and have her soldiers stop them and surround them and get the Duke back and shoot the 4 Mercs execution style and take Duke back home.

Probably for the best this is not continued, makes no sense