All Comments on 'Maiden Voyage'

Your story is very erotic and sensual, I really enjoyed masturbating for you.

Very good,

Steve

I loved reading this. Definitely something I'd like to try

Puffy nipples are indeed hot. And keep writing!

I'm thrilled you three enjoyed my first effort - and enough to comment too! I really appreciate it. I'm just surprised no one has commented on the glaring, amateur typos and errors dotted throughout... yet! ;-) I really enjoyed writing this and have so many more stories in my head I now have the confidence to get down in words. Thanks again.

Enjoyed your story. Hope you continue to write about these characters.

I want to read about great eating and there has to be a strapon involved sometime...

Excellent story, nicely balanced plot.

You may have problems with the majority of readers as they don't know what Rugby is! (Though many will skip that part to get to the sex)

Keep writing.

This is very erotic and very well written, you have a real knack for narrative flow. Out was also a very believable story.

engrossed in the action in your story that I didn't notice if there were any gaffes. Big tits and nipples and dripping cunts and aroused clits rubbing against each other to orgasm - what normal horny male would notice any errors? I was too busy noticing my throbbing erection! I'd really like to witness this tale in real life! Thanks - definitely 5 stars!

2 words: HOT & MORE

mmmmmmm, loved your first effort.....looking so forward to more

Very nice, especially for the first published. We'll all be in luck reading future efforts. More please!

OMG. very exciting. Also aroused by anonymous commenter and his "throbbing erection". Shame he is anonymous.

Wonderful story.

I can only dream.

Xxx

Emily

This is pretty good for a first effort Kitty. Among others, the story should please the chubby-chasers. Keep on writing because there's definitely some talent there. A couple of tips for you, though. When you use a question mark, and I'm surprised your editor didn't pick up on this, you only need one---any more than that just looks odd and OTT (the same applies to exclamation marks if ever you are tempted). Also, try not to use visual noises like 'nnnghhhhnnnn' and 'aarrghhh' as they just look like something out of a cheap horror comic---there a plenty of real words you can use to convey your meaning.