by demure101
Excellent writing that brings the reader slowly into the developing story and then to a powerful ending.
but crotchless panties? They seem completely out of character for her.
Nicely done, I really enjoyed it. I think you captured the difference in cultures very well, the dialog was just a little stilted at times as though a non English speaking person was talking, which made it very realistic. I didn't think the crotchless panties was over the top, as she had made up her mind and was going to use all her feminine wiles to land the man she wanted.
A. Nice treatment of a romance between two people who had been burned by others. Well done, five stars
The only thing that gave me the willies was her pinching his nipple. I hate that with a passion. the offending THING that does that to me will instantly be thrown to the opposite wall, just a reflex for me. My wife tried it only once...