All Comments on 'Make Love Not War'

great story. sometimes the hottest sex comes after a good fight. I also like how it's unclear whether the parents are putting 2 and 2 together with the open door and dress on the balcony. nicely done.

they know and are silenly giving the ok

It was a very nice story and I hope you continue with it at least another chapter. I like the way you started off with them fighting then slowly started to make up. As for the parents I think they kinda know what's going on or that they know and just letting them be. Anyway it was a very nice story and to read another chapter.

You keep the reader's attention well. The sex descriptions are pretty sensitive & loving--I like that.. There does not, however, seem to be a lot of inner or outer conflict about the propriety of incest---it was just a little too easy to slip into it (so to speak) without much agonizing. More background, more character development, would be helpful. Keep up the good work.

that was a good story a good start but something in the midst was off the build up could have been better and the erotic part could have been better described but overall a good story

Well written, suggest in the next chapter confirming that the parents know and are okay with it. They caution the kids to be discrete, and keep the sex at home. Actually condoning sharing a bedroom. The build is adequate, to the point and I don't see the need for a lot of angst about incest.

I feel like the story is following a cliche version of many other stories.. Maybe try to mix it up or surprise us with something kinky like the parents joining in.. ;) -kait xx

hope to see chapter 2 soon. this is a great story so i hoe you continue it,please. i like the characters and the way the story is going,so write more of it.

they forgave each other to fast and then just jumped into the sex. what happened starting at dinner to the end of this chapter should have been spread over months NOT HOURS. slow down and build the plot PROPERLY giving details and time for them to work things out. it would be nice if you deleted it and rewrote it making makeup process longer and more realistic, adding a second chapter would also be nice. as is I would give it a 2-10 vote it was just too rushed and unrealistic for my tastes.

One of the best sister brother stories I've ever read.

Really well written, and very believable. Quite funny in a few places as well.

9/10

Agree it is one of the best sister/brother stories and I would like to read a few more chapters of this exciting "adventure"

thanks

Hot character. Seconds episode maybe?

No setup, no rhyme nor reason. A limp dick story.

I think this was a very nice story. It was all the better because you didn't find the need to measure his 5 or 6 or 7 or 14 inch dick. great job and ignore horny kip, He is just full of criticizm. whenever he criticizes a story, I know it's worth reading.

I liked the story. It had enough character development to be believable and it was hot. I enjoy your writing.