All Comments on 'Making the Squad'

by kimbelina

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sexysmilesexysmileabout 16 years ago
Great start..

I liked the pacing at the beginning of the story, but it seemed to get rushed once Julia arrived. If being with a woman was a long-time fantasy of Jennie's, it seems their first moments together would warrant more description.

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