All Comments on 'Mall Conquest'

good story, except Jason was a random event and didn't add anything

Imperfections and changes of pacing can have significant impact on how a story reads. I am not an expert.

But this story does a bad job of conveying feelings or making the reader feel present.

3 inch diameter????? Now a 3 inch circumference would be small, but diameter is really large. That is like the size of the bottle of run in my booze cabinet. Never saw one that big, except in some doctored photos. Interesting touch though, having a son walk in and participate.

My pussy's wet and my nipples are sore!

More stories, PLEASE!

Here's a hint...learn some adjectives. Then, work on story structure and, perhaps a foreign concept, believability.

don't we all just want to be like mike

it had me hard the hole time

He seems to bring pleasure to everyone. We need more men like him.

I always love all of your stories, thanks for getting me wet night after night!

Great story - there should definitely be a sequel! You are one of the few writers who seems to have an actual hold on the underlying subject!

Loved it ..... please write the a part 2.