by shatee23
...not "defiantly", as you wrote several times.
But that is something a good editor will catch for you next time.
And there defiantly - er, DEFINITELY should be a next time. :D
You have created characters that are really easy to care about, which is vital in any good story. PLEASE keep working at it, I know from personal experience that writing improves with practice.
I know that I need an editor. I am in the process of looking right now. I just wanted to see if this was something I really wanted to do, and to see if people would like it. So keep the comments coming please. I need all the help I can get.
You need an editor, it's just crazy. All over the place and grammar and punctuation needs a lot of improvement.
But very entertaining. Thanks for sharing. Looking forward to some more submissions from you.