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The Eugene-Mel vs Chase "meeting" was brutal. Although Mel and Eugene personally changing how they addressed each other after the initial NY trip signaled rough waters ahead for Chase. So we did have a bit of a heads up.

Since Chase and Mel were clearly in a monogamous relationship if I were Chase I would have found it impossible to get beyond the betrayal so I find the "forgiveness" aspect hard to believe. That said it's the author's story and it was entertaining. So 5 stars

I would have walked out of the bar and never spoken to Eugene or Mel again.

They would have both been dead to me.

The level of betrayal it would have taken to orchestrate their ambush and relationship is beyond the pale.

If he then tried to ask me to be his "best man" I would have shaken my head and told him he doesn't deserve anyone to stand for him because he is not worthy of a friend like that.

Gene and Mel are shitheads breaking up with Chase the way they did. I know because that’s how my “best friend” at the time and my girlfriend at the time did it to me. They waited until we were on a senior trip to Disney World to spring it on me that they were now dating and I was no longer wanted in her life. Since that time, he’s been dead to me. That was in 1978. I hope one day his wife pulls a “honey, we need to talk” on him with her multiple APs standing there. What happened to the ex-girlfriend? No clue, who cares?

Mel should have gone to him by herself and explained to Chase that she needed more than he could give. Gene should have waited at least a few weeks then gone to him Mano-a-mano, explained he had feelings for Mel and that he planned to screw her br-er, pursue a relationship with her, and asked for Chase’s blessing. Especially because of everything Chase had done for him.

I have to say that if the thing between Eugene and Mel caught you by surprise, you're an idiot. I saw it coming a kilometer away. Would I have still seen it, if I were Chase? Maybe, maybe not. Chase is a fictional character, and I'm a real guy who reads A LOT and is 50. Different experiences bring different knowledge and perspectives. On the one hand, I congratulate them for not going behind his back. On the other hand, Mel should have broken up with Chase, alone, first. And then maybe she and Gene could have gotten together a month or so later. Or at the very least, be discreet about being together at first and then let people know.

Reading this story again....

Eugene and Mel....hmmm....talk about not knowing how to be mature adults. The way they ganged up on the Main Character was just juvenile. Forgive them, of course! Be best man at the wedding, absolutely not! Wish them both well, tell them both if they don't grow up their relationship will not last, and then move on with your life.

One doesn't need people like that in their lives.

Well written though, and believable except for the juvenile break up and such.

Sincerely,

Payenbrant

Unique. But how Mel and Gene handled the "ambush" wasn't cool. Mel was within her rights to terminate the relationship. The MC was a nice guy and a good FWB, but nit much more. But seriously? Fine end the relationship. Say she needs something more. Then give it six months or longer to start up with Gene. If they really care for each other but want to donthr honorable thing then give it time. Gene was almost comical in his inability to understand the bro code. Don't hate him. Like his maturation up until last page and then after Chase recovered. But seriously that is your friend. Let Mel handle the breakup. Say she needs to move on and what she is looking for. Don't ambush like that. Wait then until Chade has moved on and then even longer until he has a new direction. Thr ambush was not cool and detracted from the story. I get that Mel and Gene really had a connection. But for the sake of Chasez you can cool it down. If it was meant to be, then it will happen. Doesn't have to start RFN in an ambush. To be fair, Chase wasn't ready to move further with Mel. He really loved the sex. But he knee little of what she desired, what she did, and what she hoped for. She wanted security, dreams of children and a house. Chase was not motivated to step to the next level. So she is perfectly justified in ending their relationship. Just not like that.

Story went from a 5* to a 1* when he forgave Mel and Eugene. Fucking wimp

Excellent

Gene definitely deserved a beating. No way in hell I'd be his best man either after that shit lol. Give me a break.

great writing, as always, but am not rooting for Eugene and Mel here....terrible people(characters)

BRAVEHEART. (FREEDOM)

to live, to love, to commit?

I tend to agree: one of the worst stories oh Literotica. What is the moral to this story? Never help the weak? Don’t go out o your way to help someone who is in pain?

When I was in college my best friend broke up with his girlfriend. In point of fact, she broke up with him. She was kind of hot and had a thing for me so she asked me to date her. Mind you we had NOT been making out and emotionally cheating before they broke up like the scum in this story. Despite their break up I turned her down. It never occurred to be to take up with my best friend’s girlfriend.

Epilogue: they reconnected and they’ve been married for several decades now, great kids and grand kids on the way. I was in a rock band in college and I’m not too proud of the number of women I was with…but dating my best friend’s girl was too low even for my low moral standards.

I’m sorry. Mel is. Skank.

Good story. Well written because it happens to often.

Simply put very few women are not looking for a long term relationship. Mr. Studmuffin finally paid the price is all.

So he manned up for it when many of us couldn't. REM

TOO MUCH B.......S. Mates don't do that in the real world. But Thanks.

Great story. Thanks for your writing.

WORST STORY ON LIROTICA.

Chase helped Gene when his faggot ass was bullied at school and his wife fucking another man in front of him!!!! And the bitch repays him by dating his shithead girlfriend, their marriage wont last!!!!! Genes a pussy whos become a arrogant little shit and Mel is a whore that loves the nightlife and cheating.

Con amigos como éstos....para que quiero enemigos

Sorry, don't buy it. A buddy doesn't do that to another buddy. If they do, there are not worth having as a friend. Sure people who work together develop feelings for one another, but do you act on them. Hell it was only a month or so. I don't expect Mel to remain faithful to Eugene, perhaps that is why he didn't feel the need to marry the slut.

Damn. For the first time I'm giving one of your stories less than a 5. Not because it wasn't that good. It was. I just could not get past Mel and Gene, as honorably as they dealt with fallinto g for each other - or rather.as YOU had them falling for each other and dealing with it honorabky - and being emotionally such a blow to a real stand up guy who as you had it turn out discovered himself to be the marrying type at all. Were it my story, I'd have had Mel and Eugene conspiring to fake falling for each other to force Chase to confront himself and decide that he really was the marrying kind and HE had better stand up and fight for the woman he loved at which time Mel and Eugene would burst out laughing and admit the ruse. And naybe have the four of them, Bev veing the fourth, planning a double wedding. But that's just me. 4.

Loved it, made me smile⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Well done.

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Definitely an interesting perspective for an LW story. Well written.

Neither Mel or Eugene went looking for what happened between them. They spent a lot of time together due to business, got to know each other and feelings occurred.

Yes, it sucks that they hurt Chase. But, they literally told him the next day after they kissed for the first time and realized how they felt.

I'm still trying to figure out the comment about them not following the proper protocol. WTF is the proper protocol in that situation? They were up front with him immediately and didn't try to call it anything other than it was. It was a crappy situation for everyone and they did the best they could in the circumstances.

Its like biting the hand that feeds you. After all Chase did to help Gene, Gene went and betrayed him with Mel no if's and or but's about it. Gene should have told Mel "no" regardless of any feeling he developed for her. Even after Mel broke up with Chase, Gene still should of told Mel no and that he would not betray his friend Chase by ever having a relationship with her. He owed it to Chase for all his help because Gene never would have prospered without Gene's help. Chase should have beat Gene's ass and told Mel to Fuck off for the disrespect and betrayal from both of them.

Good story, very interesting. I read some of the comments. I think Mel and Grne done the honorable thing. Once they realized their feelings Mel broke up her relationship. She did not acted behind his back. In a way, even if she was married, she've done the right thing. Keep in mind they both knew they don't love each other and just enjoy their time together.

I have read several of your stories. The humanity of the characters is quite believable. This one reminds me of John Wayne's character in "The Man who Shot Liberty Valence" Keep up the good work.

Great story, kept me totally interested all the way through, very well written. Turns out Chase was the pussy/sissy all along. He was totally betrayed and had his heart ripped out by his best friend / lover and the wimp he rescued from the miserable life he was living. Just unbelievable. No way in hell should he ever forgive or speak to Mel or Gene again. Throughout the entire story Chase was portrayed as being the tough guy, yet he didn’t even try to kick Gene’s ass. As I said earlier, Chase was the one that was the real weak/sissy.

Read through this again after a while. Been a few years since I read it the first time. The major plot twist that happened with Eugene and Mel falling for each other and then both speaking to our MC....? That was really low how they did that. None of the proper protocol was done. It was essentially an ambush. It was amazing to see how little they cared about their friends feelings. I almost feel like writing an alternate ending. Though I am sure I would not do the tale justice in the least. Such a lack of communication on the part of Mel was pretty incredible. Especially when it was gently put forward that it might be the main character's fault that they were being so shady?

Well...the story was very well written and the flow was good. Easy to follow along and keep track of everyone. The ending was all of those things I just said but also exceptionally unbelievable. A man who was forced into being a cuck and then pulled out of being one. Being rescued and then mentored by his rescuer slowly coming to the decision of taking his mentor and only friend in the world's girl? I can't believe someone could consider that and still be considered a man.

All said and done. Well done laptop writer. I disagree with the ending but your writing is top shelf as always. Thank you for sharing your imagination and talent with us.

Sincerely,

Payenbrant

Eugene was not a friend. I would never get past that.

Good story but no one builds multiple $20000 toy houses in a week. Those things take weeks if not months.

Realistic, compelling. Chase and Mel essentially dated a few times a week for one year and never decided to live together. The result was predictable.

There is no fucking way. I would never talk to them ever. If I saw gene sometime I’d beat the shit out of him. After I bust up some of those fucking$20,000 doll houses. You were a kuckhold and a low life before this guy showed you how to be a man. Then you take his girl. What kind of shit friend you turned out to be hun wimpy. You discussed me.

started great, then ended like shit..

Well, I like it a 5 worth. Our hero wasn't really wanting to marry anyone, just get the freebies. If you don't claim her, someone else will

GUESS SOMEONE ELSE SHoULD WRITE A BETTER END TO THIS TRASH STORY!!

BITCH MEL IS SEEING THE DOLLAR SIGNS WITH GENE!!

SOMEONE SHOULD FUCK UP THE BACKSTABBER GENE AND BREAK BOTH HANDS

It was obvious from the start that the slut Mel would be after Gene, the AH!!

The real wimp is Chase, a pathetic loser character

How could you start a relationship by back stabbing a only person who supported and stood by you despite of consequences he might face by meddling in your business. He made you a person with pride and self respect, he created paths for your success, he reclaim your manhood, he became the source of your bright life. Am you backstabbed him. Wow just wow. I'm more passed of his friend rather than his girlfriend. She saw the money and potential stability. But his friend is a snake pussy. He found the opportunity and back stabbed his friend without any second thoughts.

I enjoyed the story,Thanks

I liked the story, even though I was worried early on the Eugene and Mel would be getting together. It all worked out OK though. The mention of the Vermillion River brought back memories, I've driven past two of them, one in S. Dakota - We drove past there once, oh wait, it was a town called Vermillion, maybe there was a river too. But the one I remember best is in Ohio. I spent about eight or nine months about twenty or so years ago, flying in, for business, to Cleveland, then taking a rental car and driving West on Interstate 80, for some reason I always remembered passing the Vermillion River - wouldn't have known the name, but there's always a sign when you cross a river saying what it is.

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Don't know why I remember that river. Maybe the name, maybe it was a nice looking area, maybe it was the halfway point or maybe I got off the next exit to the town I had business in. I've always enjoyed looking down a river or stream as I pass it. Always wonder what it would be like to camp out next to it, or hike along it or raft or canoe down it. The times I've been able to have always been memorable and enjoyable. Except the time I camped too close and the river rose suddenly from a storm upstream and nearly washed my campsite away. But that was a memorable experience too, and a learning one.

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Anyway thanks for the story. It's a lazy sunday, the dog is sprawled at the other end of the couch, my tummy and the pup's are full of a great breakfast, and I just might stretch out for a snooze.

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I liked your protagonist, if you haven't already, more stories with him as the narrator would be good. We don't know many details about him, so I make much up in my mind, which works out great. Really good storytelling.

He act tough at the Start then became the titular pussy at the end

I just can't help but believe, that timid, grateful, lonely Gene would steal his one and only friend's girl. This came across as Mel seeing a lot of dollar signs in Gene's future.

2 stars. Eugene broke the code, and Mel let it happen.

That sbrooks103x's comments were exactly spot on? Nope, not for one second. Signed: BTW

Even better on the second read.

I've kicked it up to five stars fron the four i

I originally awarded.

Well written. Well done.

After almost a year I reread this story. It's still a good story but like I said before it left a bad taste in my mouth. Then while reading some of the other comments I came across one that reminded me of something that actually happened. After high school I had been dating this really nice girl and we were getting serious making plans for the future and things like that and I would always confide my feelings about her with my best friend. Since 3rd grade (1961) we always confided in each other. As we got older the topic of girls comprised a lot of the talks just trying to figure them out. After a while my relationship with my girlfriend started to cool off. Of course, we doubled a lot with my best friend and his girl but coming up on two years we decided that it wasn't working out and eventually broke up and just became friends. Well, about a month after we broke up, my best friend came up and asked if I minded if he took her out. I said really, I didn't know you liked her and he said, actually I fell in love with her the first time you introduced us and again I said, really! How come you never told me? He just gave me one of those looks and I said, yeah dumb question. They did get married, had three kids and we were still best friends until his death some years ago. As another commenter wrote that is how it should have been done instead of Gene and Mel making his decision for him. Still a good story, though

I was thinking Chase would somehow end up saving Lisa after she learned her lesson from losing Gene. Well-written. 5 stars.

Mel and Gene getting together was pretty predictable, but none the less very good story

The triangle is what gives it the tension, but still, Gene doesn't come out of it looking great. At the very least, he could've waited till they broke up.

Beautiful. Nicely done.

But if I where Chase, it'll take years before

I even take a call from Mel and Gene.

But as I was reading the story, I had a sense something between Mel and Eugene

is going to happen. It did.

Possibly the worst story I've ever read .

Congrats

Great work (especially the characterizations). Personally, I’d love to read more of Chase’s adventures getting involved in other’s business.

Gave this story 5 stars, but it still disappoints me since Chase and Eugene let me down. Chase for not kicking his ass especially after saying he would if he saw him again. Eugene for shitting on the man who gave him everything. This whole story was about friendship but somehow it became a cuckholdship with Eugene basically running everything with zero repercussions. He got Mel, he got to be rich and successful, he got the other guy to stay friends and be the best man, got him to except shares he did not want, and for some reason showed up to help Chase with the abusive boyfriend. Hell Chase even thought it was honorable at the end that they cucked him in the way they did. I had no problem with the forgiveness of both parties but see no reason to even try to remain friendly either. Biggest surprise to me was he didn't end up with Lisa.

With friends like that, who needs enemies......

Story was pretty good until the Eugene/Mel turn, completely spoilt it, there's no way that Eugene should have betrayed his 'best' friend like that, you should never get interested in another friend's girl, especially if they're still together. Physical or emotional Mel was cheating on Chase, he should have walked away and just left them and should have wrote them both out of his life for good. Eugene and Mel turned out to be selfish people. Can't wish them a good life, despite it appearing that Chase moves on

A good story makes you think and, yes, a good story can get you enraged. LTW wrote a very good story that made readers think and has enraged many of them, myself included. But it’s still a high quality story.

Others have stated the obvious same thought, but I think Anonymous on 2/19/21 summed it up perfectly. An emotional affair is still cheating. That's why I can't stand to hear the terms work-wife or work-husband. Although this is a work of fiction, it's a real shame that there are bastards out there that will stab you in the back while calling you friend just like Eugene did. Never forgive cheaters. Cut them out of your life and just try to move on. Hopefully karma fucks them in the ass later on.

Was a good story until the sudden turn in the story at the end by Eugene and Mel to shit all over Chase.

Eugene broke the "Bro Code" plain and simple. You don't get interested in your friend's girl while he's still involved with her. Nope, that's just taking a grande ole shit on your friend as payback for all he's done for you and is the biggest dick move you can ever make. Regardless of his feeling Eugene should have walked away from Mel and told her why...You don't shit on your friend and you don't cheat on your guy.

Emotional affairs are cheating! Mel cheated on Chase by starting an emotional affair with Eugene while still stringing Chase along. Neither Mel or Eugene deserve Chase's forgiveness and Chase should have wrote them both out of his life for good. Eugene and Mel turned out to be selfish people. Hope the two have a shitty life together.

This would have been a 5 except for friend taking his GF. Dropped to a 2 at that point.

Taking a friends girlfriend is unforgivable no matter what the circumstances are. When Eugene realised he was developing feelings for Mel he should have distanced himself from her. If he did that then Chase may have realised and questioned Eugene on why the change in behaviour why he was distancing himself. Then maybe it would have resolved out into the way the story played out anyway.

Eugene was really just as bad as Lisa in that respect even though he and Mel didn't do anything physical and didn't physically cheat before admitting their feelings for each other to Chase they had emotionally cheated and the physical cheating was there in the wings just waiting for the right moment.

Mel was just as bad, while still in a relationship with Chase she was obviously becoming emotionally involved with Eugene and effectively cheating on Chase.

It would have been better if Mel asked Chase that question 'where is our relationship going?' then maybe they would have broken up and allowed some time to pass before she and Eugene got it together.

Really good story but twisted viewpoint.

We all know where a great story derailed in this case.

Well defined characters but the plot left a bad taste in my mouth. There was no reference to Mel ever having asked Chase where their relationship was heading. A good friend would never do that especially after everything Chase had done for him. Eugene should have, at least, waited until their relationship ran it's course. Then it was set up that if Chase didn't forgive them he was the bad guy. I have to hand it to you LTW you really know how to hit people where they live. A perfect example of "No good deed goes unpunished.". Thank you for the story, I think

Have to agree with Pappy7 except I gave it high marks for execution.

My feelings about this have changed in the past few years. It's still a great five star story, and I'm glad Chase ended up with someone, but I NEVER would have stayed friends with them or been Eugene's best man.

Gene owed him EVERYTHING. He got him out of the abusive marriage, got Mel to set him up in business, then takes his girl. When he and/or Mel started developing feelings for each other, an HONORABLE man would have told Mel (if she came on to him first), that he couldn't do that to Chase.

Mel owed Chase the chance to give her what she wanted. If he couldn't, they break up, then a MINIMUM of six months later Gene and Mel get together.

He would have never been my friend after betraying me. No, Hell NO!!!

You got a man, who does the right thing, has ethics, morals, and then, becomes a pussy at the end. Don't buy it. You wonder why he has commitment issues, just have to look at Mel's behaviour. For him to be friends again with a guy he barely liked before, went out his way to help, and get screwed. Author, you missed the boat on this one.

What a cast of unpleasant characters.

Smelled money and went after it. Tells you all you need to know about her.

Even the ex wife was more likeable by the end, and that's saying a lot. You don't go after your best friend's girl, no matter how you feel about her. Especially when he goes out of his way to help turn your life around. Despicable, both of them.

Could make me forgive either of those 2 traitors. I saw it coming from the moment Chase introduced them, but I really hoped it wouldn't happen.

Would it be mean of me to hope Eugene comes home some night to some guy banging Mel on their bed?

Yeah, I don't handle betrayal well, and their's was every bit as bad as Lisa's. Worse, really, because Chase was a nice guy that helped him out, only to be stabbed in the back.

Well thought out and written. Kudos to you sir. I am looking forward to more greatness from you.

What a delightful change from the usual fare! Thank you for sharing it.

I like original. 5*

Good story, but can't buy the ending. No way that I would even go to wedding, never mind being the best man for these two.

Been said many times, falling in love doesn't "just happen".

No good reason to ever speak to any of them, including Tony, ever again.

May as well have been an MM cuck tale ending; your woman dumps you for your supposed "friend", everybody is sure you'll be fine if only you could find your own "replacement woman", and then bygones are bygones and you all hang out and barbecue together on Saturday afternoons.

Meh, 3* for technical competence

but didn't care for the way it progressed. But it wasn't my story to write.

He should have kept his promise to kick Gene's ass and never had anything to do with either of them again. And this time he should shove the stock certificates up his ass.

Eugene is the worst kind of man(?) or friend. He exhibited the same kind of cowardly demeaner while he was stabbing his only friend in the back. It just isn't done. And there is no way that he or Mel could predict what Chase would do or not do. Rationalization on their parts that he wasn't one who would commit. Hell, he committed to being Eugene's friend in school and later. Mel is just an opportunist who decided to hitch her wagon to the better earner, and someone who was more presentable than Chase. Wear a nice set of clothes? Really? Also when your girlfriend starts giving nick names to your friends and having a secret little understanding with them. Probably not good. If they wanted to be sneaky and slimy, sure let them. But don't make your main character like it. Neither one of them was worth a shit and being friends with them was just stupid. Two stars for the shit sandwich you gave Chase.

No good deed goes unpunished.

but fuck being friends with eugene, mel, lisa and tony. Eugene is the worse kind of back stabber, you save his ass and he fucks you over.

Very well written, different from usual LW plot, but I hate it. Just can't stand cheaters winning. I would be his best man, but instead of handing him the ring I would knock his lights out and leave.

No, just no, no, no, no, no. End the story at the camping trip. I mean, yeah, I love a happy ending as much as the next person, but no fucking way these two assholes (Eugene and Mel) deserve a happy ending with forgiveness. Absolutely no. Emotional cheating is worse than physical cheating. "Oh, we didn't fuck, we just fell in love" Fuck them.

Now, as much as we all want everyone who has ever loved us to pine away for us forever, I doubt that if 'Gene and Melony' are truly happy together, they will give a rat's ass about Chase anymore. They will go on with their happily forever life, but Chase shouldn't have to hear about it ever.

Could have thrown him the consolation prize of Rita without the forgiveness for Eugene. Actually, should have done that. But, his forgiveness actually stirred even more emotions, like Chase becomes the pussy and Eugene becomes the man. Which, I suppose, was the point?

Excellent story. Unique take. Five stars. Still hating that Chase forgave Eugene and worse, become best friends with him.

You don't have to actually fuck someone to be a cheater and that's what Mel and Gene did. They stabbed a good man in the back then cried when he wouldn't keep being friends with them. They can say all they want about how "it just happened" or how they spent more and more time together because they worked with one another but it doesn't matter. It takes an actual decision to open yourself up to romantic overtures and that's what these two did. If Mel was ready to break it off because she knew he wouldn't commit to her the way she wanted she should have done so openly. Instead she waited and strung him along until she hooked another guy. As for Gene, the back stabbing piece of shit knew damned well Mel was with Chase. After all Chase did for him going after his girlfriend was the epitome of being a shithead. I don't care if he wasn't really in love with her or not, neither one of them behaved with any honor and I don't blame Chase for telling them to go fuck themselves. You don't treat someone you care about like that, especially someone who went to bat for you as much as Chase did for Gene.

This story started off so well but the last quarter of it just left an awful taste in my mouth. I've never been a fan of stories where the MC gets fucked over then decides to forgive and forget and the author tacks on a new relationship for him in the end. I became invested in these characters and Laptopwriter made me basically dislike two of them then gave an incredibly unsatisfying ending for the main one. This is not good writing.

"He met Rita, she was a victim of domestic abuse, for plot reasons they fell in love but I'm too lazy to write about it, he's going to marry her, yay!" Wow, this shit's unsatisfying.

The story was supposed to be about Chase and, by association, his relationship with wimpy Eugene. Instead it became the story of Gene and all his success as seen through the eyes of the guy he stepped on then fucked over. In order for me to have found any satisfaction in the way this turned out we should have gotten a whole HELL of a lot more content about Rita, who she is, what about her makes her so different from all the other pussy he's gotten that he fell in love with her, how their relationship evolved, and most of all what exactly makes her better than Mel. There should also have been some kind of atonement from Mel and Gene before Chase forgave them and agreed to even go to their wedding, never mind be the best man. Giving him time and space then buying him a beer and shedding some crocodile tears is not atonement. It doesn't matter that they fell in love or even that they're better for one another than Mel and Chase were, it's about making up for being complete cheating assholes and that didn't happen.

I like a lot of Laptopwriter's stories but this one... no. Completely unsatisfying vignette about a guy getting back stabbed after sticking his neck out with a tacked on afterthought of a happy ending. It's a failure as an entertaining story.

Just couldn't believe it. In my world even if the couple broke up, you don't get to date her. It's just not done, you hurt him by doing so. If your fine with hurting him, go for it, but that's cold man. So in this story both guys are pussies, Gene was a pussy, and Chase was one as well.

She was right in knowing that he would never decide to marry her. But that doesn't not give her the right to seduce his best friend into marriage.

Very unusual plot for LW. Creative. Great job.

No they didnt, they spent time together building a romantic relationship, they engaged in sexual actvity - sure they didnt fuck

But they didnt approach him and say they were starting to have feelings and wanted to see IF they could possibly build something

They waited until AFTER they had a relationship to cut him loose - thats cheating, fucking is just the cherry on top, the cheating is over and done with long before the fucking ever starts

Many years ago, when I was 18, my best friend was dating a ballet dancer. She was a year older than us, slim and very beautiful, with lovely long chestnut hair and bright blue eyes. I had great chemistry with her and freely admit I was completely smitten.

Even when their relationship started to cool off, I would never have dreamed of making a move on her. After they had broken up, I bumped into her by accident 6 months later. Going out with her then would have been perfectly fine, but by that time I was dating my future wife.

Betraying your friends the way Eugene did is never acceptable. I can see Chase forgiving Mel when he upgraded to a woman he fell in love with and realised that he never felt that strongly about his ex. But forgiving Eugene? Fuck that!

Chase helped the pathetic loser turn his life around and Eugene repays him by seducing Mel? Eugene deserved a savage beating for that betrayal, not forgiveness!

It shouldve been a great story, but betraying a friend is a stupid thing... 1*

Bullshit story! A true friend would never hit on his buddy’s girl even if that friend had feelings for her. He would not make any complements about her looks or personality. If she said anything about liking him he would immediately cutoff her conversation and tell her that he could never be her boyfriend. Gene didn’t do that. Gene was just another selfish bastard. The ending is just self serving for the author. Chase had been with Mel for a long period of time so he would be in love with Mel! How can Chase suddenly be in love with a girl that he just met? The entire ending is crap.

Maybe the title influenced the others. Both men had to man up though. Perhaps if the players story included more on how his new relationship built - more on how Rita was a far superior choice for him... maybe others would like it more. Still giving it high marks. It was a great story and I enjoyed it... which is why I like coming to Literotica.

Wow, what are friends for?

What was shaping up to be a good story was ruined by the Mel/Eugene hookup.

It's a great story, but the Mel-Eugene hook up thing really killed it, and not in a good way either.

I mean, on one hand, I can see where it was coming from. (Honestly, I also saw it coming from light-years away.) Chase was scared of commitment, Eugene wanted back in the saddle, and Mel wanted a husband. And I'd imagine was at the point where it was "shit or get off the pot". I'm honestly glad they didn't do it behind his back.

That said, have you never heard of the "bro code"? You don't do that to a friend, especially one that bailed you out like that. That's how you do him? Wow, some friend.

That made this story not horrible, but much less likable than it could've been.

JMFC

Had to give it a one, for such unlikeable characters and the utter betrayal.

But it was so well written and so original I had to give it 5* anyway. I just Mel-Eugene sticking in my craw is a failing on my part. Sigh.

But I simply didn't like the story. Chase does everything for Eugene. He gets him out of a bad marriage. He lets his girlfriend set him up in business. He gets him into a self defense class. And what does Eugene do? Steals Chases's girlfriend and marries her. I looked it up in the "Bro Code" handbook. Rule number one - Thou shall not mess with your bro's girlfriend. I don't care if Mel and Eugene were soulmates. Eugene crossed the line and there's no coming back. Chase should have written them both off - permanently. Couldn't enjoy the story after that.

But not a story that I could enjoy. Betrayal like this, by the best friend especially, is unforgivable. His reaction was not one most men would have had. Staying friends and being best man at the wedding just don't make sense.

You should have set this story in the 1950s or earlier so the "not proposing after a year of dating, with zero hints" would have come off as any sort of an issue. They were exclusive. That alone was reason enough for Gene to back off, if he's any sort of real friend. At the very least, he should have talked to Chase about how Chase felt about Mel before making a move.

Chase taught Gene parts of being a man, but he forgot to teach him honor, respect and integrity, which is why Gene still relies on the weak, weasel tactics he needed to survive before Chase came along to help him learn a better way. As for monkey-branching Mel, Chase is well rid of her if she's going to run off with the first dude who shows up with more money (and she'll get hers when she stops getting hers in the bedroom now that she's with weak Gene) - but that doesn't excuse the knife in the back his friend Gene delivered.

The story was quite enjoyable, up until Chase so easily forgave them and became good friends with them again. No sense in holding on to hate or anger for long, but friendship goes beyond forgiveness and requires trust. A guy like Gene is not to be trusted.

Thanks for the story.

Cog

Good story but shitty ending. No way that the betrayal of a friend, one who Chase really helped, who owes him to some extent, should ever be forgiven. I wouldn't forgive Mel either although I guess her stabbing him in the back seems less heinous, she is a woman and that is what they tend to do. Eugene, however, really pissed me off.

Yes I see a sense of betrayal here, but I see it as a realistic progression. Chase was probably never going to commit to a relationship beyond sex. At least they were honorable enough to inform him before actually doing anything. If he's still crying in his beer he should remember the expression "use it or lose it" I think he felt more badly about losing the steady sex than with whom he lost it. Gene had more courage of his convictions than Chase once he grew a pair.

However...There’s no way in hell Chase should have forgiven or remained friends with Gene or Mel. They both stabbed him in the back, big time. In fact, instead of being Euuugene’s best man, I think it would have been fitting for him to have broken Eugene’s nose. And maybe crushed his nuts some too. As for Mel, well, just piss on her and the horse she rode in on. Revenge may be overrated, but payback can be sweet.

I knew what will happen from 3rd page on. But this is BS ending. 100% wimp does not become Steven Seagal no matter what, and such a betrayal is not forgiven by a healthy male. Meaning that characters are oversimplified and the ending forced characters into a sudden and ridiculous changes.

That is not a sign of a good writer, sorry.