All Comments on 'Mandy's Exile'

Nice

You had me engaged till the end. I really liked the ending too. Not many stories on here can wrap up an ending so well. Keep it up 👍

Loved the story start to finish. Always a great story from this sexy lady.

Good story.

Hope there is a second pArt....only one issue...he did not slide an 8" dick all the way in a virgin.....an 8" deep vagina is as rare as a 12" dick.....and does not happen with the first slide in......sex 101..vagina deepens with orgasm and sex lasting more then 2 minutes....average is 5_6" .....assumes can take length not pussy which is why women want thickness over length

Need an editor.

This did not end well. I feel you could've kept the story as a cliff-hanger for the future if you wanted to continue as a series. Elope to the unknown, starting a family is such a cheesy ending. Too cheesy I'd say. Anyway a story is a writer's own. I hope you well in the contest.

You totally lost my interest and soon as you started with the "sir" and " slut" crap.

Enjoyable read.

I need a second part to this, it was incredibly sexy. I love BDSM so the slut and sir element was incredibly hot. As was the breeding at the end. I need to know what happens if he finds out that she's his sister! One of the better reads I've found in awhile on here.

I loved it, however the ending felt rushed. You could totally do a part two and elaborate on their life together. Other than that I loved it! I'll read the second part if you make one.

Loved this story. Fabulous from the start. Keep up all the great writing!

I dont always enjoy bdsm but this was light enough not to spoil a great story.

It just did not seem to have the right ending or I would have given it a 5.

It was getting really good until the bullshit ending. You definitely seem to have insight into the mind of a sub. The love and absolute trust she has to have for her dom. But then you kinda pulled a Steven King on us. Don't get it twisted. Think of the bullshit ending of the Stand. Imma read more of your stuff. Somehow I think you are better than this. The story was good though.

The ending WAS rushed, but it fit. I liked the two of them together for the long haul, even if we only got it in summary.

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His true parentage was a chekovs gun that never was used, so that felt a bit wasted. Still, I enjoyed it a lot. 5*