by Erica_Gasca
You misspelled "sheer", he had "his hand in his hand", and there was some Spanish (I believe the 2nd set) where it made no sense.
UR story was way to short. Better have a part 2! It was a good story.
i love the dominant male/ naiv teenager......give me more.....
even love the way you use direct conversation...insted of tellwhat they said....
and to the other comments all i have to say is....omg its just a fantasy....get a grip
"Being in a new country was strange and hard for Marissa. Not only did she have trouble understanding the language" - the quote is surely a reflection on your poor grasp on the English language, Get a damn editor at least before submitting.