All Comments on 'Mary'

This isn't an incest story. They're not related. You may think that revealing this is a cute ending, but when you reveal it, you contradict yourself; for, to repeat, that shows it's not incest.

I especially like this brilliant sentence:

"I can't believe I'm letting my brother fuck me," she whispered but loud enough for me to hear.

Sue in Los Altos

Generally, I do not agree with the negative critics, especially those who post anonymously but for this I find myself agreeing with them. The premise of the story was good, a brother and sister fucking and him getting her pregnant, but I find that it was poorly written. The telling was too choppy and lacked imagination in detailing. The part that was the worst was the twist at the ending when they "find out" they are not really brother and sister AFTER telling their parents that he got her pregnant. I find that I agree with what someone else commented, in most settings they would probably be disowned by their parents for what they did. Instead, you have them say, "Oh well that's good because you really are not brother and sister because she was adopted." That is misleading to make it seem as if they are brother and sister then throwing that plot twist in at the end. While some still consider it taboo for adopted siblings to have sex that does not equal to incest. Next time show that from the beginning.

Its an okay story.. while in relife I don't condone incet relationships.. however these people say its not incest because they are not blood related.. I think if you are raised together as brother and sister its the same thing. Two people can meet, have sex, then find out that they are related.

pretty piss poor story no real plot a rush to sex no build up no real character development more like a first draft than a postable story.

Turns out to be not really incest after all.

Figures you wouldn't actually use an actual established bro/sis pairing. Copping out with some adopted BS...

And about as exciting.

So adopted siblings are not real siblings? Ummmm they aee just not biologically related.

Crappy story...

Trite...Heard it all before but written better...Did NOT arouse me!