All Comments on 'Masquerade'

very nicely written :-) . . . sadly all too few incest stories show that real love can develope between two people, even if they are brother and sister

While most of the story was pretty hot and erotic I noticed a glaring problem that was NOT explained.

She wore a mask to keep him from recognizing her at the restraunt.... How did she eat and drink wearing an anti bacterial mask...(covers nose and mouth)

Wow, someone give the detail king a medal and call the press. That couldn't have gone overlooked, in the interest of justice. Your story was great, it had a plot, and was romantic. Nice work.

Loved everything about it. It had a plot and a very nice ending. GREAT work. :D

I thought the idea of a mask was rather refreshing in the story; but then when the author just shit all over the invention ---- I must assume she use her ears, eyes, or some other bodily holes to take in the food and fine wine her brother ordered. <p>

I can't believe an author coming up with such a great, original meeting situation shit all over it like that. That, to me, is a sign of her not caring about either her/his own writing/thinking or the readers; or both. Either case it is terrible. For otherwise, if you simply deleted the few lines where she put on that stupid unworkable mask, the story was fine; it was well written.

You ruined the story with the mask.

yes it was a nice touch to start with,

but how do you eat and drink without taking

it off? next time proof read your work.

missing an important detail kills stories.

omg loved it please please please make a sequel pretti please

When one puts in the effort that a good tale requires for no pay then their only pay is a compliment or some appreciation. Nit pickers GO FUCK YOURSELVES

My sister and I live together the same way. We've been having sex with each other since she was seven and I was twelve. It's true that I fucked her and kept fucking her, in the beginning, but as she quickly got used to it, she grew to enjoy it as much as I did. That was thirty years ago. We grew up together and have stayed together.

We have three adult children and there's nothing wrong with any of them. Defective children being born to family members is a scare tactic that's commonly used to discourage them from engaging in sex with each other. Since each ejaculation produces millions of individual sperm cells, the ONE sperm that fertilizes the female's egg is actually highly unlikely to result in a defective birth unless the parents share a serious congenital defect.

Devoid of anything to say good about it. Utter tripe.

I gave it 5 stars, but the mask thing could have gone better. Maybe like the ones Hollywood Undead use.

This is a nice story but it reaches a bit too much with the premise that Jackie could actually convince herself that she had fooled her brother the whole time. Still with the suspension of disbelief a reader owes to a fiction author it was plausible, albeit far from certain that it could actually happen this way. A good effort and worth the read.

But it was too short and the end was far too hurried.

Good plot and nice character though.

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"I'll call you tomorrow," James shouted.

Wanting only for him to leave, she turned around and said, "Okay."

"I love you," he shouted.

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They did NOT say that! Lol. On the second date?!? Daaaaamn!

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She pounded James' chest with her fists. "You know! You bastard!" James stood silently. "You knew I'm your sister and you let me fuck you! How could you?"

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...now thats women's logic for ya! (Checking over shoulder for wife;)

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She crumpled it up, stuffed it in the litter bag and kissed James. Smiling, she told him, "You're gonna get lucky tonight."

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Rofl!! Maybe we (men) ShoulD look a gift horse in the mouth! Would be nice if she said 'hey! We're about to take on a new huge expense and responsibility! You in??' Hehehe

Loved the story, very unique! Funny that he knew even before he met her, lol. I thought p he would have figured it out shortly after he met her and started talking to her. The face paint was spur of the moment genius!

Thanks for the story :)

Could have done without the lying, but it was good overall.