All Comments on 'Me and Dale'

Well written first time tale. Well drawn characters, good dialogue and a happy ending.

Great staff.

5 + Stars

Keep on writing

Good story!

5

Great build up. Excellent story telling, fantastic ending. Chapter two????

Great ending! You didn't try to keep on going when you had already reached the climax. (no pun intended) Too many new writers don't know when to stop and end up ruining a good tale. I'll look forward to more from you.

.……. and now twenty-five years have passed. After going separate ways for college, we got back together after school. Even though we had not seen each other more than off and on for the four years of college, when we graduated it again was love at first site. Dale is as playful and loving today as she was when we were in high school. I am so happy that she came into my life.... a real soul partner as well as an exciting partner in bed...… it all started with my sprained akle

Paragraph number 5 opens with "I had drank".

I drank .......

or

I had drunk ....

are both English.

I had drank ..... might be hillbilly but it isn't English.

I hope it gets better. I'd hate to give up on a decent premise.

Well done!

It’s refreshing to read about two characters who are not God’s gift to humanity as far as physical attractiveness is concerned. It’s equally pleasant to follow the very real hesitation that stems from inexperience and respect. You let the relationship develop, incorporating circumstances that make this story both memorable and touching.

Smooth prose and good editing.

Cheers to you, and thanks.

you lost be from the start. no reference as to where those cities are located. Dale is clearly a man's name, not a woman's name. Juniors in high school are 16 years old. and leave junior year at 17. your lie about everyone being 18 didn't change that. your choice of english is horrible. no one talks that. period. i had to skip huge gaps in your story because it was literally unreadable.

I liked your story. When can we read more about Dale and her friend?

This story has so much potential

i was expecting something great since it was the nominee. but it just sucked. the name DALE is male. there's no if ands or buts about it. its not one of those unisex names, its straight up male. and the pathetic way they get together... seriously? my dog could come up with a better story. i smell a rat.

Was Dale Evans.

I knew female who's name was Daliah

When she was young she did not like

her name,and went by Dale.People criticize

some of the stupidest things on this website.

Good job Frodov,keep writing.

Great build-up! Excellent detail, but I wish their orgasms could have been more descriptive. 5 stars, nonetheless! Will there be a follow-up story to this?