by Bateyboy
..a cock as big as yours."
this was ok...but not the best...next time have someone proof read your story for typos...i think that's the worst thing...reading a story and getting into it, then BOOM...there's a word that doesn't belong or is spelled incorrectly...good job for the most part though.
Yep, it needs a little proof reading but the story line is quite good. Leave a line to show breaks in the time line. That would help smooth the flow. Last thing you need is to listen to that "Anonymous" person(s). HA! Please continue this soon!
This was just ToO cOOL...!!! LoVed yR sToRy.....pLeasE dO wRiTe mORe....