All Comments on 'Me, My Brother, and Marie'

Take me to Paris...

You've avoided one of the chief problems of storytelling: you haven't said too much. There are hooks all over the story where you could link another and go on, or just let the reader's imagination do the work him/herself.

Next stop Paris!

Great start. So good, I was surprised to see it's your first story.

Will there be a chapter 2?

when siblings come/cum together! Yes, an inane play on words. Your story was so much better; plot, developement, variations and open to continuing possibilities. Thank you.

Excellent story, loved it!

But I don't think this is your first, at all just your first at lit. Great story. with great promise for more to come!

nice story. Loved the pace. I can't move a story along as quickly as you did. Not a lot of useless details and it flowed so well. Plus it was very erotic and wonderfully arousing. Thank you

You are an amazing writer sweethart, keep up the good work...

I loved this fantastic story. Very well written and it took me back many years to my own experience.......

Hope to see more writeing from you soon

This is a really nice story! Thanks for sharing it with us.

A lovely story, beautifully written. Had a French feel to it - not just Marieee. Made the sex seem perfectly natural and normal - as it should be. Humans, with their enhanced self consciousness (self conscience) are really the only creatures that worry about imagined morality in sex.

That was probably one of, if not the, best stories I've read on this site. Beautifully composed and with a minimum of unnecessary exposition. The characters, through their dialog and actions, told us everything we needed to know. Please resist the temptation serialize this. It works so well as a one-off. I suspect you'll be able to come up with more tantalizingly erotic stories and characters without having to build further on this one. I'll be anxiously awaiting your next submission. Well done!

Maybe it's because they're cute, and they have poossees that they share. That's good enough for me. Let's all go to Paris.

Great first time story. Thanks for posting.

If this is a first contribution to Literotica then you've been "holding out."

The only way to demonstrate our appreciation for your talent is with more stars. Unfortunately they limit us to five. I'd rank this one at fifteen, minimum. Wonderful, "sweetie."

More please!!

Great first time story. I hope you write more--a threesome with Marie would be really hot.

And what happens in Paris?

I wish my sister was her! I think of her daily.

Build up was at just the right pace; not too quickly or too slowly. A sequel would be welcome.

Build up was perfect. The girl-girl action made it really hot!

What a wonderful story, So warm, loving, and sexy! I wish the author would write here again... Thank you, ShariSue!

wonderfully written story! Alas, a one-off. I wish there was more written about this intriguing trio.