by 2Write2Live
Personally, i just don't like your writing style.
You have a great base for a brilliant story thou and I'm sure others will enjoy it.
Just lacks the "flow" i prefer.
Don't be disheartened though. Keep going and enjoy your writing process.
Thank you for your comment. I encourage you to send me direct feedback. What kind of writing style do you like? I can't address something of which I am not aware.
This sounds like a ranch in Vegas, except it is run by one woman, still not a bad story
Thanks for your comment. I don't recall seeing any meadows in Nevada. I did see some beautiful aspens, though, in Great Basin, NP.
Enjoyed it very much! Looking forward to reading more from you!