by juicyj19
Fantastically precise, both the descriptions of the actions and the presentation of the thoughts.
Possibly the best presentation of the combination I've read here. Especially from a 19 year old. I wish I knew where she went...
(fans self vigorously) Wow, that was very hot. Never thought about using fruit like that ;)
Thanks for sharing this story with us!
This is a nice enough little story but you need to take more care and be more consistent. In Chapter 1 Nikki was sober enough to drive Angie home and yet in this chapter after (I'm guessing) about an hour, she says that she is a little drunk. This is the sort of thing that readers will always pick up on and a good editor would have spotted and corrected.
A finely crafted story. I can't wait for MMA3. Falling in love the way it should be!
This story is getting better and better. Perfect writing as always and nice creativity with the fruit, *wink wink*. Please keep giving us more !!!!
I loved reading this story, it is fantastic. I can't wait to read the next part to it.
I Live in Queensland, Australia. We've got a mango tree in the backyard. We love fruit.
I like this. Why dont more women enjoy the slow languid way of making love. No you because your a man have to just shove it in, and if you've got anything under 7 inches your a losey lay.