All Comments on 'Meeting the Boss's Daughter Ch. 02'

Thought this was about Katie and not Amy.

weird switch halfway through

I agree with the previous comments, swopping from a story about daughter 'Katie' to secretary 'Amy' half way through seemed most unusual.

I apologize for the confusion. I felt it was gonna be a long read before anything actually happens so I thought I'd add a filler. Then, I thought it might be too long a read altogether so I cut it again into two parts. The second part is still pending approval.

I apologize again. But thank you for reading.

I thought the switch was nice and sexy....keep writing, love your work

I like your style of writing, just TOO SHORT. I wouldn't mind seeing all 16 chapters in one or 2 at the most. What is the obsession with 1 page chapters. I have started seeing this lately, especially with newer authors.

I will probably continue on for a couple more PAGES", just because I like your style. The noncomplying sort is different for me but, the Secretary was there of her own free will.

Some editing would be beneficial, but at least read your work out loud, and you will catch most of that.

Good story though so far keep writing. 8-).

This is not organized well for coherence. A couple of nice vignettes. Maybe should be separated by 5 dots, so we know we're switching characters. Here, the boss' daughter Katie is handed off to him for orientation & more. But next paragraph is colleague Stan pounding the exec sec Amy; when we should be beginning the next tentative interaction between our guy Derrick and Katie. If these posts were running longer, perhaps we'd better comprehend how these parts connect.