by Mattart
Most people are willing to suspend a certain amount of existence in "reality" for stories like these (okay, 95% of reality), but what often makes them sexier or more exciting is when the effort is made to make it seem like, maybe, possibly, something like that COULD, if Jupiter aligns with Mars, happen.
It doesn't seem like too much effort was put into staging it - "What I have to work naked?... Okay." Customers show some surprise? I like the basic idea, but it seemed so unrealistic that it didn't connect with me.
A good advance on this would be she gets a friend to apply, the shop preasures her to join the friend in the nudity and then there is an emergency were they need to go to another shop to pick up something and they are the only employees not deep in a job. The other shop could be in on it and cause all kinds of trouble on their end.
Great story it busted my nut right on que.