All Comments on 'Men at Work'

tough to read without any...

Lack of punctuation. No sentence structure. A disjointed story line. No rhyme or reason to when paragraphs ended and new ones started. Incorrect word usage.

Try this for example, "Jim grabs each of his stumps and lifts Steven up with them.. Then lowers Stevens cock into his mouth. They Steven can feel Jim is about to come.. Me too Jim.. (sic)" What?

Wonder when they stopped reading or did the issues they found not prevent thenqfeom reading to the end (:

Was very hard to read. You need an editor.

Interesting story, hot, easy, comfortable sex for 2 men of a like mind, nice.

Different way to tell a story, but IMO, it works, but also consider most readers on next story. Many folks have rather rigid expectations of how writing should be structured, they would hate James Joyce.

I guess it was a story, but very hard to read and follow.

Looked past the unconventional writing and enjoyed the raw gay devotee thrust -- would love to spend the day with Steven at Hippie Hollow!

The story is sexy and I think describes well the gay sexual relationship. Makes me feel hot, so many thanks for the author.