All Comments on 'Men in Uniform'

in the annals of summer job lust.

I'd have liked a bit more of the action before the boat ride home .... but there is enough to stimulate my imagination.

The story needed a little help with the transitions from one position to the next. Also needed to expand upon the build up and the actual feeling happening. Overall decent but there is room to improve. :)

Solid first outing. Hot descriptions. As mentioned below, the transitions between images/positions could be a little smoother, but the important thing is...you're able to get your reader excited. You'll only get better the more you write. I look forward to reading more by you.