All Comments on 'Merna's Story Pt. 09'

I really enjoyed Merna’s Story. The characters were great and the story was fun. The only issues I had were your horrible spelling and misused words i.e. message instead of massage, pore vs. pour, etc. You, also, would drift from a first person narrative to a third person narrative and back again in a single paragraph. I would suggest a good editor to polish your narrative and word usage to make for a first rate tale!