All Comments on 'Michael or Mac Ep. 02'

Great story. Loving every bit. Looking forward to the next chapter

Another excellent chapter, looking forward to more. Emma and Donna already knew how Josh broke his hand. Donna really should have stepped up and at least told her BF the story, as Emma told her. It’s at the point where Michael isn’t accomplishing anything by hiding Mac’s identity.

Great story, but you do need an editor.

Your story is getting better and better. Your development of the romance between Mac and Emma is a pleasure to read. The development of the conflict is effective. I can't wait to see what happens when Mac is at the police station. I have a feeling Mac will have a lot of fun. Keep writing. Your crafting of the story is better. Very few spelling errors. Thanks! K

Great read…. Looking forward to the next chapters….Thanks

It's a good story and I'm looking forward to the next posting. A writer once told me a story is a great conversation that has a natural flow to it, that people can't let go of. With a natural conversation it's hard to overcome the constant use of the characters names. It doesn't feel or flow the right way that people would normally have a conversation. There are too many Mac's, Em's, Kim's, Ron’s, and Pap's. The readers know which characters are talking to each other, it's already been established within the content of the story. I know you are reluctant to do this but please get an editor. This story can quickly go from good to great!

Sarah or Susan. Pick one dude.

Two great story's getting desperate for both to continue, Please!

Still reading this, I can't stop.