by rick200
One can NOT inherit anything from a cousin only from parents , grandparents etc.
The story unfolded too fast. The fact that the cousins french kissed in the club with all of their friends around made it unbelievable. No one is going to do something as taboo as that with other people around, especially people that know that they are cousins.
You should have waited until the cousin took her home before a move was made.
Take your time and let the story breathe next time. Don't Rush.
It was a good story for your first try but it did unfold a little to fast. Keep up with the good work!