All Comments on 'Midnight Delights'

I couldn't finish reading this - the proof-reading is so poor. Out of respect for your (potential) readers, please take the time to proof-read properly, or engage with an editor.

Some examples:

"My last were to him I..."

"I Bent of and took..."

"and wondered how much he had saw"

An editor can help with:

-keeping the same verb tense throughout sentences and paragraphs

-correcting homonym and other [more subtle] spelling errors

-grammar and punctuation

Gave you 2 stars for your first effort; it deserves 1 [that's how much all these errors get in the way of the reading experience]

one of my ultimate fantacies brought to life keep writing!!!