All Comments on 'Midnight Movie Club Ch. 06'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 3 years ago
Great story, but terrible dialogue

This would be an amazing series, if only the dialogue was not so stilted. The language is too stiff and formal. "Would you like a drink.......yes, I will partake of a beverage" style, rather than "Can I get you a drink? Yeh!, that'd lovely"

People speak to each other in a low brow, casual manner rather than such a formal way.

Other than that it's great. A little bit of reciting the dialogue would turn this into an awesome story

AnonymousAnonymousover 2 years ago

This series is great in that it is at least a little more realistic about the college experience, ie studying, classes, activities outside of sex. While an obvious fantasy it is much more grounded in reality than most t of the college age porn on this site, which just makes the sex hotter as it is at least a little more likely to happen.

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You ever have a friend who keeps saying, "you should write a sexy thriller" or "how about an erotic novella" or even "PORN! SIT DOWN AND GIVE US SOME PORN!" Well, I hope they're happy. I prefer longer stories with dialogue and personal connections for the sexy times. My le...

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