by PoisonPen33
This would be an amazing series, if only the dialogue was not so stilted. The language is too stiff and formal. "Would you like a drink.......yes, I will partake of a beverage" style, rather than "Can I get you a drink? Yeh!, that'd lovely"
People speak to each other in a low brow, casual manner rather than such a formal way.
Other than that it's great. A little bit of reciting the dialogue would turn this into an awesome story
This series is great in that it is at least a little more realistic about the college experience, ie studying, classes, activities outside of sex. While an obvious fantasy it is much more grounded in reality than most t of the college age porn on this site, which just makes the sex hotter as it is at least a little more likely to happen.