All Comments on 'Midsummer Night of Passion'

Similar stories seem to cluster up from one day to the next. What I am going to say to you is virtually an exact copy of something I posted a couple of hours ago to another first-time writer on Lit.com.

"Welcome to the fold. Your word skills are very good, but your story is not a real story. It is an expertly drawn description of a sexual coupling but we know NOTHING about who is doing the fucking. It might be a couple of octogenarian siblings, or the night janitor scoring with the boss's virgin daughter, or even a young wife with her minister. Those little details would matter greatly to our feelings.

Please DO keep 'em coming, but, hopefully, you can expand to put some bones on these skeletons.

Enjoyable. There is one fault, the word lay is past tense and you are writing in present tense in which case the word id lie.

Very good introduction to your writing of erotica. Hope to see more, why they are FWB's, is there more?

The details about the kissing really resonated with me. Thank you for writing and sharing.x