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Generalizations made about people will tend to get you in trouble with the group that is being generalized.

(EG: "The rest of Literotica")

I can tell you that, insofar as the NonHuman, Scifi/Fantasy, and Romance sections go, there isn't much cuckolding or cheating. Dunno about 'generic black guys', though -- I also only tend to read

A.) longer stories (3+ pages)

B.) stories that sound interesting

C.) stories that have at LEAST a 4.5 rating.

While I'm personally not offended (it takes a lot to get through my skin) I'd recommend you not write with that attitude in mind -- anger begets anger, as it were.

Just my $0.02.

I understand what you mean, my friend. It's just that when I go looking around for stories about big things (busty gals, hung guys) I always seem to find such dark stories that is more about betrayal than sex :(

Anon from earlier has a point.

Fortunately, I have a solution for ya:

"search.literotica.com" -- a truly wonderful resource; I used the following conditions:

*Only stories which are "Hot" (have a rating of >4.5 overall)

*Rank the stories from highest vote score to lowest vote score, showing highest scores first

*Show the stories within a certain date range, noted below:

NonHuman stories:

1 week & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=14&db=text&date_from=1week&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

1 month & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=14&db=text&date_from=1month&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

3 months & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=14&db=text&date_from=3month&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

6 months & newer

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=14&db=text&date_from=6month&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

1 year & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=14&db=text&date_from=1year&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

All stories ever uploaded:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=14&db=text&date_from=&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

Sci-Fi & Fantasy stories:

1 week & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=38&db=text&date_from=1week&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

1 month & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=38&db=text&date_from=1month&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

3 months & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=38&db=text&date_from=3month&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

6 months & newer

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=38&db=text&date_from=6month&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

1 year & newer:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=38&db=text&date_from=1year&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

All stories ever uploaded:

http://search.literotica.com/search.php?type=story&q=&cid[]=38&db=text&date_from=&date_to=newer&sort=vote&sort_order=desc&hot=on&author=

Have fun.

Understood, I'll make sure to do that next time! And thank you so much for your help, guys!

You spelt a couple of words wrong here or there by using an extra letter

Or by using the wrong tense and by using a different word than you ment

Great storyline and all so even though grammar was iffy you still get 5 stars

From me next time proof read be fore you publish please.

I understand! I'm really glad you liked it that much, despite it's flaws <3

Today seems to be my day for furry stories.

4* for effort. Not bad overall.

As recommended, use your word processor's dictionary to spell-check. It won't get usage errors or dropped words, but it will help. A reader and/or editor is even better.

Careful on the metaphors -- if it doesn't flow with the story, it can bring the overall imagery you have built down like a house of cards. The big example that hit me was this: "If he was a cartoon, ..."

You are already asking the reader to suspend disbelief and buy into the tale you are telling. This metaphor asks the reader to stop and recall something totally outside the story and imagine it -- and it can be difficult for the reader to get back into the tale. Some may be able to slide past it, but when I read and the tale is good enough, I stop seeing the words and the story unfolds like a video in my head. So there I was, following your story, and I had to stop, imagine a cartoon with hearts for eyes, and the connection was broken. I was able to reconnect, but it was like starting the tale from that point forward. Again, some people can that metaphor with no issues. In different media, it would work wonderfully (2D art or video for example). My point is that exchanging one fantasy image for another and then trying to get back might lose some of your readers; it reminds them that this is a fantasy, not real, in the middle of your story. By grounding your metaphors in common, everyday experience, you actually help your story by giving the reader something they can relate to, helping ground the story for the reader so they can buy into the disbelief a little more.

Hope you find the feedback useful.

In any event, keep at it. Practice improves skill and raw talent both. Your scores are decent, and that means a lot of other people like your stuff, too. Good luck!

i loved your other stories and this one did not disappoint