All Comments on 'Mimic Ch. 00'

Great beginning, please keep up the good work

A fair amount of this introduction was exceedingly confusing.

I got through it, but remember: we aren't in your head. You have to show and explain everything so that we can see and know what you do.

It got clearer towards the end, but still...

When I finished reading this, my brain hurt, but I kept on reading and got up to chapter 4 (the furthest chapter posted at this point.) NOW I really appreciate the prologue. It leaves the reader stymied by its weirdness, and by doing that, it reflects the weirdness Zerret feels after coming into existence. It's like all the pieces are there, floating around, but they haven't formed into a clear picture.

As I continued to read, my brain felt better and less puzzled. Things feel clearer, and whenever you can make a reader feel intensely like that, you know you're onto something. Well done!

This chapter is confusing but shows a lot of promise.

She should have been worried about wings and spitting FROST breath all around