All Comments on 'Miss Frumpy'

But I absolutely loved it!!

I really enjoyed this story. Sometimes it seemed a bit rushed, and some more details could have been added but it is still different to so many others here. Thank you.

Congratulations, this story establishes you as one of the top authors on this site on your first submission. The premise for this story is fresh, as well as absolutely a positive agenda for style, class, and deportment. Erotica is great, but sometimes truly Loving Wives allows for hope (which is an important part of life).

Kudos,

Easylivin

Excellent submission. Crisp, great dialogue, a little mystery. Sexual parts were suspense building to the ultimate "climax".

Very fine,took me back to some of those blessed moments in my life when I have loved and been loved with all the lust and passion that goes with it.Great story.

I enjoyed it thoroughly!!!

A unique storyline. Keep writing, you have a talent for it.

Well done! a splendid, gentle, story of change and discovery. Roger

of the best stories by a new(or any other)author that I have read for a long time,it puts you up there with some of the best.

I wanted the story to go on....

It reminds me of my love for my late wife......great tale!

Wow I love it would not change a thing about it

Well - now you have a nice problem Author. How does one follow this - but I think you will - in time.<P>

Sparkling with depth and flowing with word pictures. The real problem now is that you may begin to believe all these accolades and let them go to your head.<P>

The driver on this effort was the respect for each other and that came from you which builds your credibility as one who lives in the real world with a plausible fresh look at it.<P>

Don't rush but we look forward to your next.<P>

Thanks Author - you are appreciated<P>

With High Regard

Good pacing and fine narrative drive. The story grabbed my attention and held it consistently throughout. Even though I knew what the outcome would be, it was delicious watching the ladies man and Miss Frumpy fall in love. Thanks for a story well told.

I don't usually read stories from the "romance" section but on this occasion I am so glad I did. Romantic, most definitely, but also erotic as hell. The build up to each encounter was paced at exactly the right speed with a lovely mixture of anticipation and giving in teasingly slowly to the desires both characters felt. Top marks my friend, but please make the Literotica community happy and write another story.

Sort of "Pygmalion" for adults! Well paced and well written - Congrats

George Bernard Shaw should be noted as the inspiration. However, even though we all new the outcome and what was going on this story was so well written that it is still fun.

great job.

Sweet, romantic and elegantly written, this story is absolutely wonderful. Auk, your hard work and diligence have paid off. I congratulate you.

Molly

There has to be another chapter to it!!! there just has to be! You are truely talented!!!!

Lol. George as the coach was quite interesting. Great read.

I have already read the story 9 times and can't get enough of it! One of the best stories ever!

i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I enjoy seeing someone else that shares my knowledge and passion of exercise and nutrition - it's nice to not feel alone when I occasionally grandstand about it.<br>

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Now then, please take this as constructive critiquing and not as criticism. With that said, I could not make it past the second page (or even through it). It felt too narrated and boring. The story told me things, it did not show them to me or let me experience them. It was, up to that point, awkward and boring.<br>

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You know how to write and I've read one other work of yours that was phenomenal, but I have to say that this one just did not do it for me. Perhaps it would have, if I'd have been able to stick it out. Hell, you even warned the readers it was a long buildup. I had enough of the hurry up and wait in the military though. The story just did not begin with the earthquake most readers expect that grabs their attention and makes them feel invested and connected to the story.<br>

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You've got talent as a writer and I think this has the potential, in your hands, to be a great story. It needs some polishing up though, at least in my opinion. A good rough draft, but a lot more detail and personalization needed.

wonderful story.Truly enjoyable. Great work!!!

Amazing skill in this story. I love how George kept up his "coach" persona so long and how Prudence, ends up taking the reigns while still maintaining her "student" persona. This is a really skillfully written story. One of the best of its category, for building heat and tremendous payoffs.

No criticism from me, but the story did seem to lack a definitive declaration of "love", and given the very long build up, I might have liked to have this moment, but the last scene in the office was pretty damn close.

Well done, would love to hear more from you!

I presume GK is THE "George" Shaw was writing about? Only mild criticism was the slightly abrupt ending, but enjoyed the journey.

This is one of the best trips in Literotica! Don't miss the train! Oh, and if you get aroused, well, just think... who wouldn't?

Thanks, aukamm. You're sick, but in a lovely way! ;-)

He sculpted his Galetea and she sculpted him into a faithful lover. I really enjoyed George's confusion over his teaching Pru all the "tricks" and his internal dialogue about his previous conquests. There are plenty of people who would call him a egocentric, womanizing jerk (and they'd be right), but remember he only did what his "dates" allowed him to do. If a used car salesman tells you something about a car and you believe him, as long as you aren't a minor or truly mentally disabled, I don't care what the law says: you are the one at fault.

I tend to shy away from stories more than 3 pages - I guess due to a short attention span. "Miss Frumpy" was an exception! The story is well developed - both character and pace.

You should write more stories - you have a gift - keep on giving!

Really, very romantic and touching, ;)

Seriously could not stop reading this one. While there were a few things I was a bit uncomfortable with, the build up and the heat growing between them made it all worth it.

This was a farce—a delightful, absurdly enjoyable farce that had me smiling or chuckling most of the way. And yes, it was sexy, if not real. But kudos for a job well done.