All Comments on 'Mistaken Identity'

Pretty nice. Your word crafting is excellent and a nice love story develops. You really could benefit from one of the free volunteer editors on Lit.com. They could help you avoid some gaffs like your frequent resort to plurals when you mean possessive words, e.g. "uncles and aunties" when you meant "uncle's and aunty's", and similar. A second set of eyes can iron out things like that. I would be happy to volunteer next time out.

Maybe the best I’ve read on this theme. Ignoring a couple of typos, it was perfect.

5*

Tc

Very hot story. Five stars.

Cute

Magic

Great job!!

I normally don’t go for brother/sister stuff, but this was amazing! I couldn’t help myself. <3

Wow!......That was hot. Please do another chapter.

Great story, well written. Loved it five stars

Excellent job on the story! 5/5

Totally agree with MissEmmaS.... Nice one! not normally a bro/sister story person, but loved this.

Good prose. Good sense of reality to the story, and emotional depth that adds realism. The only thing I'd avoid is the "narrative intrusion" of switching back and forth to the thoughts of both characters. Pick a main Point of View (POV) and stick with it. Otherwise, very strong story.

Slow and lengthy on the lead up, but the finish was excellent. Next chapter? 5*

Fuck that was hot. More please.

It made me hard.

Do me a favor though. You ended up being one "pert" shirt if me screaming and throwing my phone against the wall. Please, think of a couple different adjectives. To use instead of "pert." I believe I'm scarred for life now.

Fun Hot Sexy! Please more, tell us how they they sneak around mom and dad or do they find out and join in?

Very Hot!

One of his best yet. He gets better with every story.

11/10!!!!!

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Still good on an Nth re-read!

11/10 Whips!!!!!