All Comments on 'Molly's Muse Pt. 01'

Absolutely amazing....plz write a lot more

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Amazing story

Oh my. This one was amazing. Waiting for the next chapters ❤

We need more of this

I like what you got! You have an interesting style of character interaction. It's not overly or underly sexual, and I appreciate how these are characters who aren't simply playing into the stereo types of "dominant dickgirl tops femboy". They just seem like two people trying to communicate what they want in the moment.

Biggest recommendation I have is to diversify they way you convey that a character is speaking. You use "Molly said" or "I said" very often, which is good for letting us know who's talking, but you can convey more information by using phrases like "'I want you so badly' Molly whispered in my ear". It helps paint a picture and helps the characters seem less formal, right now they're a little robotic.

Last note is I think you accidentally refered to Molly as Julie at the end of Page 3.

But other than that I think you've got some good bones here! I hope to read more from you and hopefully from this series.

This was absolutely incredible! Please keep up the awesome work! Can't wait to read more!

What a great story. I had to stop working just too finish it. I hope there is more on the horizon

Bravo. More please.

Hope part two is cumming soon!

Oh my god. It has been a while since I read an actual good story with real character interaction and not just mindless sex. Pretty happy it's not just another dickgirl topping femboy story like someone else already mentioned...tons of those out there already. The way you describe the scenes is really hot. There's a few grammar errors here and there but nothing too noticeable. Definitely one of my favorites now and looking forward to the next installment!

Fucking Amazing! Keep going, I can't wait to part 2

Great story, hope you write more! One minor detail is the difference between "then", and "than". "I would rather cuddle, than have sex", is completely different than "I would rather cuddle, then have sex"!

Please for the love of God continue this!

Super excited to see where this story goes!! Wow!

A fantastic storyline, the progression from job applicant to lover was seamless and natural. Sincerely hope you take it all the way through to the publication of Molly"s latest book,

Loved it! Lots of sex and love.

I usually find myself skipping ahead to find "the good parts" to satisfy my reason for coming here, but this was well crafted and kept my interest to the last. Excellent work!

OH my goodness. I LOVED it. I loved how you built up the characters. How you had them talk about sex. How you had them start "working together" him being her muse, and her being inspired. I love the fact they seem to be falling in love, even if they don't want to admit it, even to them selfies. Please PLEEEASE keep writing. I can't wait to read more. It's not just about sex. It's about them finding each other, I hope. This is one of the best stories I have read here in a long time. As Oliver said " please may I have more?"

This was awesome, thanks for sharing.

I'm not sure if I like or dislike that you didn't say how big her girl cock was

Ok I just read what Femryder said. I disagree. I don't want to know. I want it to be my imagination. I think it makes for a better story that way. Let people dream about it. That's not the story anyway. It's the people in it.

Damn, what a story. Eagerly looking forward to more. Quite a few typos and such in the second half, will list in a separate comment. Like others, I loved their interactions! Paul has this clipped, dry humor that reminds me of British comedy, and it plays well against Molly's eccentricity.

This was great. The story was very good. It was so good that it overcame a few potential turnoffs of mine, office workplace stories, female boss stories, and usually a too assertive trans top. However, you didn't make her an abusive bitch, there was no domination or demeaning of the bottom guy, and you sweetened the story with affection. Bravo. I like a female top if shes kind and loving, which Molly is. And the writing was so good. You took a potentially over the top idea and made it work. Thanks for writing this!

Can I have some more please, sir?

What a terrific beginning. The story and characters are very engaging. Liking both Molly and Paul is easy. While the storyline is somewhat improbable, it is clever, and you make us buy into the conceit easily. As many have written here, please keep writing this story.

You'd think an editor would know what a pronoun was...

more. Give me more!

Great premise and execution. Loved every moment, but do want to mention that every time a reader hits a typo, it trips them out of the delicate scene you're trying to spin. You may need to find yourself an editor of your own to help iron out some of the little wrinkles, and you'll soon be among the best!

Keep it up!

Excellent! Perfect measure of dialogue and action!

Begs for more additions.

Hope the rest of her crew would also need some "inspiration" to perform! ;)

I actually laughed out loud numerous times while reading this. Fun and witty writing.

I was hooked, a great combination of humor, pacing, and sexy! Keep writing my friend 😁

Thanks for the comments and feedback. Pt 2 should be submitted by next week.

Author: Be Gentle

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I'm on the third page of my second read through of this work, still completely blown away. Loving this interaction, between two weird and vivid characters. Huge fan, thanks again.

Great stuff! Loving the romance brewing here with Molly and Paul. The little things, like the jealousy towards Grace, are what make this feel genuine. Also love the sprinkling of third person limited in with the omniscient. Gives an excellent sense of not just Molly's thoughts, but how surprised she is about how she's feeling. 5 stars!

Only part that confuses me is how the world wouldn't know she's a dickgirl if she's using all of this as inspiration for her writing. One would think these stories would be at least smut, if not the full futa-on-male truth. Not sure there's the kind of money in smut publishing that we're being shown...

Dope. I'm looking forward to Part 2. Keep it up!

Hi, love the characters and their interaction in the intellectual as well as physical plane.

Amazing amounts of mental gymnastics and multiple paragraphs to avoid actually writing a transgender woman when you could have just justified it without anything. Even if the content was actually decent the amount of bullshit at the "reveal" made me too disgusted to continue. "I'm sick of pronouns" from an English major? Your bias and obsession over women with penises without accepting any that actually exist is quite obvious.

Hoping for part two soon, great story start

Any eta on chapter 2?

Fantastic! I am so hard...

I enjoyed this work very much. On to part 2 😍

You don't seem to know what pronouns are. Dickgirl, vagina female, girlcock, etc. are not pronouns, nor are they close to pronouns.

Personal pronouns (they type you're intending to refer to here) are words like he/him, she/her, they/them, I/me, we/us, you, it, etc.

There are also other type of pronouns too, like demonstrative (that, these, there, etc.), interrogative (who, what, which etc.), and more, but those aren't the relevant types here.

Anyway, it detracts from the story to have an editor seemingly have no clue what a pronoun.

Just one story before going to sleep. OK... it’s quite a long one. But it’s definitely interesting enough to read on, although I have a suspicion of where this wil lead us... Bottom line: good character building, great lines, some humor and shared fantasies made a great story. I’m not an editor, nor do I need a job. But I sure would like to meet a woman like Molly once. Or twice probably ... ;-)

Seriously hot!! More, please!

Absolutely HOT start! Definitely going to enjoy this series!

Totally hooked on this and yet utterly bemused. Regrettable that there are so many errors and yet the quality of the story manages to overcome the shortcomings. And did anyone notice the name change at the end of Page 3 - how the hell did that pop up?

Somehow this is weird and yet great - confusing and yet entrancing. I've given you 5 stars because the story alone deserves at least perhaps 8 stars but the errors lose those 3 bonus stars and yet the story itself is excellent and fascinating.

I do wish that the conversation between the two would flow better - it felt stilted in places and lacking in much warmth - it needed that to bring them together socially as well as sexually.

Overall though I enjoyed it and will be reading the next chapters with enthusiasm. Keep 'em coming - or cumming!

I have to say I enjoyed the story all the way from beginning to end. 😊 Almost didn’t notice the errors. Almost. 😂 I thought you got the balance of their interaction just right. 😇

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I agree with the two people earlier who mentioned about describing the size of a penis. I hate, and cringe 🙄, when I read the “thirteen inches and as thick as a Coke can” type of description. Very crude. In my own stories I like to leave it to the imagination 🤔 of the reader. What one reader might think large 😳 to another might be only just above average. A small penis to one person isn’t necessarily small to another. 😢

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Erotica is about imagination. It’s only when writing a story aimed simply at the masturbating readers 😡 that you can put everything down. Horses for courses.

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I’m now off to read the next story (you do need an editor 😎) and my final comment would be you could have made her a “normal woman” and the story would have been equally as enjoyable. I hope the next chapter is as good.

I had a black transsexual friend that Molly could have been based on.met Summer in 2017 when we were both homeless staying at the Veterans Village of San Diego. We became good friends. 5 months later I got an apt. Once a week Summer came over for dinner and a movie. This lasted till June of 2021 when she disappeared. 3 months later she showed up at my doorstep homeless again and hungry. I fixed her something to eat and she took a shower. She got dressed and came out and sat on the couch. I sat next to her and we talked for a bit. All of a sudden she looked at me and said “You want to touch it?” YES I said,

(I told her in 2018 that I’d love to play with her but we never did) She undid the drawstring on her sweatpants and pulled them down. WOW I couldn’t believe what I saw. She was hard an at least 9-10 inches and so big around when I took her in my hand My fingers barely wrapped around her. So I stroked her a bit then I took her in my mouth, could only get half of her in my mouth. I sucked her for about 45 minutes and she didn’t cum. I wanted to let her fuck me but like me she’s a total bottom. She spent a week with me and I tried a number of times to suck her off. I could never get her to cum. In the course of that week I found out that she was smoking Meth. On the 3rd night she had the bed and I slept in my Lazy Boy she stripped down and wrapped herself in a light blanket and slipped out of my apt. Was wondering the halls of the building. A knock on my door woke me. It was our security guard with Summer in tow. He told me she can’t wonder the halls nude in only a blanket. I told her are you trying to get me kicked out? After a week I had to tell her to leave. One of the hardest things I’ve ever done. Haven’t seen her Sence. So sad I really liked her as a person.

Sorry about my previous rant. I totally loved this story. Great plot well written and erotic at the same time. I hope you continue with the story line. I have to wonder if they fall in love?

Crazy good - mesmerizing crazy good - not perfect - but awesome - thanks.

This story was so outrageous. Yet so wonerful !

Once I started reading and got into it, there was no way in hell I was going to stop until I had read it all.

You really do need a good edtitor !

Day after tomorrow as i drink my morning coffee i will be free to jump into part 02, as i see it is ready and waiting to be taken by hungry eyes.

Bits of this story will filter through my mind until then.

My body continues to twitch and jump as it did while reading part 01.

Thank you.

Scorching hot! More, please! And soon!

One of the best dick-girl stories. In contrast to similar stories, she not dominating him. Those can be good, but this one is great. It seems to be developing into a romance rather than just a business relationship. This really is wonderful. One of my absolute favorites if this ilk. I hope you will continue with many more chapters. 5++++++

Most of commenters here have already mentioned numerous times that a bit of earnest editing wouldn’t have hurt your wonderful story. All authors require it, even the famous ones.

And yet after all is said and done, you wrote story that was a real treat for my imagination and I thoroughly enjoyed your use of words like ‘girlcock,’ ‘titfuck’ and ‘dickgirl’ and the he way you designed this - Molly and Paul’s sexual activities didn’t seem gay at all. Your Molly is all girl, a Dickgirl but a real woman just the same, only more direct than many females In speaking her mind about what she requires from a man like Paul. I’m glad he was taller his predecessors and that you didn’t make him an effeminate character in this story.

Brilliant. Really well written and very hot. Can't wait to read the next part.

Magnificent story, erotic, sexy and sensual. Can't wait to read part two