All Comments on 'Mom and the Massage'

Why the rush at the end. It was a very nice slow build up and then POOF...it was over. Would of been an exceptional story if you spent as much time on the ending as you did the beginning of the story. I hope you add another chapter or rewrite this one. Such possibilities!

Nice story, shame you didn't finish it

Our characters do mundane things as a part of life, but we write to celebrate the special event. You told us:

"I ordered and we ate. I cleaned the table and threw away the trash."

But I never know if the world really cares. Yes the characters did that, but did we know how or why it got them closer to the message?

On the other hand at least you're writing and sharing - after I've culled the unimportant stuff I'm left with a short piece that reads like a recipe.

very good story.. you should continue the story line with more chapters about the 5 years

A chapter 2 would be nice

Great!

Keep it up and allowing the reader to fill in the end is a great idea.

Good story. Hearing how it progressed would be nice.

I would hope so, at least on her end. It would be very weird if he was over 18 and he mother wasn't.

That would be my dream come true!

I could picture every touch. More please !

If I was to give this votes, I would deduct one star for the shoddy presentation of your story because of all the errors that could, and should, have been removed by proofing your work. I would deduct another star for the standard of your writing. It's a good story concept but not very well told. So, I would give it three stars. And before you class me as someone who can't write, I have been a journalist and editor for 40 years and I have three books published commercially, not self-published as this is.

Hi nice story but your grammar and you editing isn’t great. If you can’t get someone to proofread it for errors maybe look things up as to how to spell them. I’m guessing English is your second language. Keep writing you’ll keep flowing and it will become more evident in your writing. In that flow is very important in writing anything even more so in erotic literature or it’s like you’ve left people alla readers with a hard on and no relief/ not a nice way to leave people but keep up the good writing and practice and keep writing down all your ideas. You’ll see it will keep flowing and the ideas will flood your brain! Have fun with it. Enjoyable story.

After reading the first paragraph, (well, it was more like a run on sentence disguised as a paragraph) I stopped reading. It was ridiculous that you couldn’t even form a paragraph so I stopped reading.

Who post shit without proof reading and corecting all the errors? 🤦🏻‍♂️

Very good detailed story. Please continue with it.

Apparently fucking was up next, did you nut in her pussy?

very good

loved it but she has a waist not a waste

WOW! Good job; thanks for sharing your work! Short, sweet, down and dirty.

A great story nice build up well done. So far was expecting going to next level. I would liked to see more oral by son in this chapter,I can see you saving it for chapter 2 hope I get to read it I liked the build up and slow progress to the main parts I hope you write more can't wait to see how you take the son to the next level. Good job!!!

Awesome

Great! Perfect grammar, spelling and punctuation.

Awesome erotic story!

LOVED IT: ★★★★★ (5.0 = 100%)!

Thank you for this story, wildman187.

Yeah it feels great when I was 19 I did the same my mother was 42 she had a havoc Thoroughout the whole day and at last she came to me and ashek for a msg she was initially in her shorts and shirt but starting only I ashek her to remove them she was wearing a blue panty and a pink bra I was msg her and slowly understand she was getting wet I was msg her back and i was in my shorts but i had a bonder i was on her and could feel my cock in between her thighs but still she was enjoying then j asked her to be straight and told oil might get on her bra so she removed them then I could see my sexy mom without bra I slowly started msg her boobs pressing them then I ashek could I remove her panty and she agreed she couldn't understand that i remoed her panth with my mouth as her eyes we're closed then I went don't the bed and started msg her boobs and my cock was just 1cm away from her mouth and mistakenly it went on her mouth she just sucked it I was enjoying too then I cum I her mouth slowly I started to play with her clit using my tounge zhe started moaning I made her pussy fully wet then inserted my cock in it it feel like heaven I ashek her tk get on her fours she was holding the bed with her hands and I just inserted my cock in her pussy and she gave a slight moan ahhh then I started to thrust from back I pulled her hairs and made her lean giving a perfect angle to thrust harder she was moaning to loudly and her orgasm made me more horny I started thrusting even harder I didn't wear a condom but she used to take pills so I knew I could cum in her pussy and I came 3 times continue and she enjoyed after that we changed our position and then she started aucking my cock then she ride on it she was riding my cock and I was pressing her boobs I was full of energy fucking my own mom she was about to cum that I stood up and changes position to missionary and fuck her so hard ahe cried jn pleasure and pain she was dripping wet we fucked for 2hrs then took a shower and sleep naked then we fucked everyday as my dad used to stay outside even today I am 22 and I just destroyed her pussy