All Comments on 'Mom Caught Us'

not the best very rushed and no character development plus very little plot. the flash back was awkwardly handeled and not very good. it would have been better to dump the motherfucking and have him find out jane was a relative (cousin, neice, halfsister) that would have been better that what was here. this should have been chapter two of three or four not a stand alone.

Hope there is a part 2. Maybe mom taking bunny man under her wing and teaching him a thing or two about pleasing a woman.

If you are going to criticize, please learn punctuation and proofread your comments. No capitals at the beginning of sentences. “that would have been better that what was here.” What have you written?

What have YOU written, anon? You bitch like a little baby because someone left a shitty comment. Then you leave an anonymous comment.

Troll.

But your grammar and punctuation need a lot of work!

Read your stories out loud and hear yourself. You'll find and fix the errors that way!

SCHUPPINZIGH@aol.com

Hot sex with a pixie and then fucking his mother. That's fucking hot.

I hope that Jane comes back for some good sex with him and is not be afraid of her husband catching her, and mom starts trying to compete with Jane as his best girl and fucks him to where he can hardly take care of Jane, and finds out she really needs her son to be her lover.

Thanks for the good read

"Dad? I prefer not to mention are talk about him" This makes absolutely no sense, plus there are a lot more grammatical errors, please get an editor

Improve the grammar and get a proof readers

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I enjoyed the hell out of the story, as for chickenshit anonymous why don't you write a fucking story & let us critique it.

Lots of vitriol in some of the earlier comments and not all about the story. Interesting.

Thanks for the read Momstheboss.

Warren