All Comments on 'Mom Son Lap Halloween'

I live in Tennessee as well this was amazing

Great story but it should go on to when he fucks his mom in the ass, that he lubed up!

This is what I'm talking about. MajorRewrite came in and wrote an excellent story. It flowed perfectly. I hate it when authors write stories with a robotic recollection and the long paragraph after paragraph format with little to no dialog. This was HOT. I'm definitely looking forward to more from MajorRewrite in this category. Particularly M/S

A foursome perhaps?

This is one of your best yet.

Apart from just a few spelling errors, which didn't detract from the story anyway, (sorry, I'm O.C.D., I can't help noticing these things) an awesome effort from you.

Thank you and well done.

This needs a sequel. Also, if you do the sequel you should try to include the Wallaces and their son, I feel like it has potential.

Very nice. Clearly, the mother wanted her son to fuck her. I think that's the way it always is. As sons, we think we're so smart, seducing our mothers, but the truth is that every mother has thought about her son fucking her. Mothers are afraid to take the first step, though, for fear of being rejected and appearing foolish. Once the son makes his intentions clear, it's off to the races.

An interesting premise, but they sure went from 0-60 quickly at the party. Then, magically, we find out she's happy with her husband fooling around, but doesn't want him to know she is? What's that shit about. And they ask their son to what is widely known to be a teasing costume party with an orgy later? Come on.... fun, but... not exactly believable, any of it.

Fantastic read! Loved it.

A very yummy story, one that should continue... Thank you!

I think when jerks say oh the story is not believable that's probably because it's fiction it's not like you said this is a true story and even if you did so what. Good story What really matters is you can write a story that's enjoyable to read. Keep it up

Thought it was going to be a normal mom/son car rides but it wasn't thank god. Brilliant story really hoping for another chapter.

Love the story. You could leave it alone or you could write a sequel.

The appearance of Carmen and Natalia was a surprise, although I was disappointed to hear that Jake is Natalia's "ex-boyfriend".

Keep up the great work.

It was too casual for a sex party. She eww when he asked

This was a very enjoyable story. Thank you for putting it up and allowing others to read it.

1 typo l noticed and maybe a couple more l didn't notice. I never give a 5 as there is always room for improvement.

Well done.

Nice could use a special two story sequel one following the mother and son and the other Alice and the father and I agree with sai_dias_29 that the Wallace's could use their own separate story that may or may not occasionally bump into the main one

I will not guide nor critique your creativity. Thank you for a master level piece of which I felt completely engrossed reading as it contained all the facets of a perfectly crafted tail. Such a refreshing change from the cringe worth drivel of norm

Well done. 5

First and foremost, this was a very enjoyable read, due mainly to your excellent writing. You kept me interested in these people, even when everyone was behaving themselves. You have a talent for dialog and reading flow. Thank you. Having said that, however...

"It was nirvana."

To sneak a pun of such Xanthian proportions into an erotic sequence was evil!!!

Well done!

To Anonymous who posted this comment:

"An interesting premise, but they sure went from 0-60 quickly at the party. Then, magically, we find out she's happy with her husband fooling around, but doesn't want him to know she is? What's that shit about. And they ask their son to what is widely known to be a teasing costume party with an orgy later? Come on.... fun, but... not exactly believable, any of it."

It's a story. Not a real life situation. And so what if it is?

It's excellent, the author has great writing abilities, and you should just quit posting if you cannot understand what this site is really about.

A really fun, horny story, which you’ve rounded off well if you don’t plan to continue, but I really hope you do. Lots of potential ways to continue the story, you introduced a lot of different, interesting characters, who were clearly having their own fun stories at the party.

Excellent story only needing a tad more lead up than given. Live the sexy vixen kitten. 4.5*

Thanks for the read.

I agree it’s yummy. I found no fault at all. I kind of like it to end there, but unique tales with mommy would be ok.

5*

Tc

Started at the top of the contest plan on reading them all and so far amazing would love to see this on continued , I loved it wasn't all treat me like a slut , not that I mind them , just they are a dime a dozen , loved the relationship build . My favorites and top rated so far ,please continue this if you can

This doesn't need a rewrite!! Fun read. As has been requested, a sequel or two is in order.

Excellent. Next Chapter, please.

Was great

And everybody was happy1 i enjoyed the story. Definitely rates a five.

Worth the re-read I gave it.

No playing around ;-)!

Excellent thanks

Yes, I agree with the others. Really fantastic story. I would love to see a part 2. Fun premise as well!

Wow great story can't wait for more this party sounded like real fun as well wow hot story

Nice, but the build-up isn’t what I’d want if I f*cked my mom. In my world there’d be a lot more time dedicated to foreplay, and discretion would be tantamount for her sake. And bedding her would last a long time because going there would not be a quick act.

Very nice. None of the "oh I shouldn't "b.s.

Good, fun story with the wife opportunistically accepting the coed who wants the husband as a lover so that the wife's new relationship with her son can continue to blossom.

Only two problems: The party is for perfect people only. It is hard to identify with them, this story is about "other people."

Secondly, not much emotion is present.

Very glad to see another story from the author of "Spring Break Wife," which is superb.

Good story.. i dont think a second part should be added to it.. but if u did.. keep it to just the mom and son dont add other people to it.. in my opinion if u add more people to the story it losses what made the story great in the first place

Great story. I hope there will be a Pt. 2. If so, please add Mrs. Wallace and her son or maybe mom, son, dad & Alice. Keep things fun!

Alice, then April? Typo?

Fun filled romp!

Great story, waiting for the next chapter.

Such a great rewrite! Absolutely love the twist you put on it. Very sexy ;)

I absolutely loved it.....Please continue.

I would love a next chapter. It was an awesome story!

Loved it, ready for more.

Such a hot story!!! Part possible?

Good story, keep it up

Good story a good read thank you

Very entertaining. I always prefer stories written in the first person, it puts the reader into the story. More similar stories please.

Loved it! Five stars and a favorite point!

How could you not keep the name of Alice on the last page? You suddenly changed it to April. Get an editor

Good story please make more like this one

I liked this story. No beating around the bush about what society thinks. Great story. I'm thinking it needs more chapters, with their escapades..

Sequel: jump ahead to next year’s party.

Tell what’s happened to our favourite couples in the meantime.

I’ll let you take it from there, because whatever you write will be great!

Marvin

loved it. the fact that both of them are cheating on each other makes it better XD

Loved it!! Please make this a a series because i want to know where it leads next!

Nice to see Carmen and Natalia, I was surprised to see Carmen jealous about Natalia.

Really enjoyed this story! Great job!

Awesome Story!!!!

The way the story played out was Great.

Hope there will be following chapters to Ryan's and Melody's Love for each other.

Thank You for the time and effort you put into writing this story.

That was a fun read and I really enjoyed all the detailed scenes that you have made in my minds eye. The son is my hero, O to be him and with such an awesome Mom! I want to thank you for taking the time to write this.

Wonderfully simple and elegant. An easy read hope there’s more but it’s ok if there’s not

Really terrific story. I initially thought it was another backseat story, but you provided a wonderful twist. Thank you.

I loved the characters you created and hope it carries on as it would be interesting to see how their relationships work plus there are all the characters they met.

Great story, but Alice suddenly changed to April at the end?

Even if the Wallaces had found out, it wouldn't bother them. Being siblings they even have the same last name. I see a small more intimate Thanksgiving celebration; Ed & Alice, Ryan & Melody, The Wallaces, their son and their unmentioned 18 year old daughter, the bi couple Carmen & Natalia, John and daughter Tracy, John's sister and their son, ect !

MajorRewrite story universe is a thing I guess. Loved all of your stories.

Great story, now this would make a great series of Melody and Ryan, incestual affair, the apartment, maybe an oops pregnancy, mom and son becoming a couple. Story definitely needs more, this story was well written and gets my 5 star vote.

(11/2/2021) Very nicely done, again. Hmm… Did the pint-size sex kitten mommy set Ryan up for her seduction or did it just happen? So, Jake and Natalia broke up after a year together. I did think Jake was too damn lucky even though he was a nice guy. Natalia did seem to be getting the short end of the stick. Good for her. Maybe Natalia and Ryan will hook up at some point; with mom’s blessing of course. Is Jake okay with Carmen hooking up with someone other than her hubby Diego at this party? I’m glad that the professor didn’t wind up like Diego or does Diego get to enjoy some extramarital fun too at some point. I didn’t think he deserved to be a cuckold. 5 stars from me again. For those who are confused read the Major’s story list.

Fabulous storey, enjoyed it, would love it to continue. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

You kind of destroyed spring break wife story. It’s one of my favorites. Now we find them at an almost swingers party and dancing with other people. The other story was all about claiming Amy and not letting any one get close. Whatever

Any more on father and student along with more on mother and son?

Very good story, with a horrible title and description. I've pàssed on reading it several times because the title made me expect the usual, "mom sat on my lap, got me excited, and now we fuck," premise. I'm glad I decided to give it a shot!

I'll have to check out more stories from this Author.

Five stars!

Particularly, the part of him picking her up and fucking her in the shower was hot.

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I guess he's in the dorm for the "college experience" but it seems he's already planning to move out. If the father is so oblivious that he doesn't know where his son is living, they could probably fuck while he's in the next room without him noticing. Even if Dad knows he moved out, at some point even an absentminded professor is going to wonder where he's getting the money. So much for keeping it secret.

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The time before the party, when they were getting ready, was essentially foreplay. If they could get away with all that and Dad really is so absentminded, moving back home and fucking shouldn't be too much of a problem.

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As for Alice's apartment, is it possible her father is paying for it for the same reason Mom was going to pay for his? Maybe Dad isn't as absentminded as his son thinks he is.

4 stars - it was an OK story but I am not into all that free love and everyone fucking everyone else.

I'm posting two links below: This story, your story, has been posted to Wattpad and I'm assuming it's without your permission since this "author" has posted several other stories from Literotica as well. It's chapter 51 of their Literotica story.

https://www.wattpad.com/1153761742-literotica-%F0%9F%92%A6-mom-son-lap-halloween

https://www.wattpad.com/user/xGiGixGiGix

can anyone tell me the story where the aunt and nephew have sex in the back of the car while the father and mother are in front

One of the better stories here. Nice, well-flowing, natural dialogue.

This was a great story! I gave it 5 stars. Ed and Melody have an open relationship. Ryan likes fucking his mom so it looks like a win-win. Much different from my life but that is what is so fantastic about reading these stories. Great job!!!

I can easily see why Halloween is too a popular holiday. Four stars.

Very hot story.

I loved the set up from beginning to end. The suspension of disbelief is practically zero. 5*

Dang, I don't know why Ryan was such a grump at the beginning! This is a wonderful scenario with a great ending.

Shaved pussy....oy vey!! I'd love to read one of these where the woman has a full, thick patch of pubes on her, hip to hip, all the way to her labia, and they get soaked in the course of her getting fucked, and her lover's cum drips out of her and hangs up in the hair after.

Other than that, hot story, great premise. Love how the tension builds to a marvelous climax.

Needed Ryan forcing himself on his mom and other women. To tame for my enjoyment.

I wish that it would have continued on after the party

I love melody lmao"I'll probably eventually feel guilty about cheating and corrupting my son but so far I'm good." I liked the story it was real it was something I could imagine actually happening it felt like kinda off coming of age type to me and other genre but I love felt "sunshine on the horizon" for what is to come. It could end here or continue and it would be perfect as the story offers room for that

Enjoyed reading this,it was what I always dreamed of doing with my mom

Great!!! This one really needs another chapter ( or `15). Maybe with their fantasy of knocking Mom up becoming a reality. Maybe even Dad and Alice catching them and Alice realizing she is getting the short end of the stick. So Son ends up stealing both Alice and Mom from Dad.

Fuck this had me throbbing the whole time. I want to read more! Have her in sexy outfits and stockings playful dress ups anything that describes her teasing and great sex. Awesome!

❤😜🤩

Oh God! This story was so good! The mom had me so horny! Please please please give us more about them. We definitely need 15 more chapters on them!!!! Shit this story was damn good. More time in their private apartment, their dates where those Aztec princess milf spots them, knocking up the hot mom, more Halloween parties for them!!!!

I absolutely need a few more stories from this. The side by side dates of Melody and Ryan/Ed and April (so glad all those names were on the last page), and a story about Natalie trying to get a boyfriend without her mother stealing/finding him first.

VERY hot story!!!!!! Although it is a long one... they always come too short, you know 😉

Good Lord, what an AMAZING story. Sexy as hell.

Hot story. I'm not to keen about the cheating aspect, but at least mom didn't turn out to be a slut at the party. The son however turning into an egotistical, inconsiderate asshole (shower scene) is objectionable. Not just because of his actions, but through his stating "that was fun" while sensing his mom's, uh, discomfort. I'm not a fan of such inconsistencies regarding the personalities of a story. If he was portrayed to be that way right from the beginning, I could have decided whether to read the story despite being unable to sympathize/identify with the main character. But if he devolves from Dr. Jekyll into Mr. Hyde close to the end it ruins the whole experience, so to speak.

Good read, the characters were done so well I felt jealous of the son. If mom wasn't perfect like I like women it's hard to see dad get an 18 or 19 hottie. I do hope dad gets Alice pregnant, Melody and Ed can get divorced and Melody can move into the Apartment. Then when Ryan graduates they can move where no one knows them and they can be a real couple. There are so many follow up stories about all the characters but I feel so connected to Melody and Ryan I really hope you continue but don't ruin it and have mom hookup with the rich son or a foursome with Ed and Alice maybe Alice, Melody and Ryan.

I know that's not the first student Ed hooked up with. Mom and dad have been going to the party for years how many hookups did they both have in years past.

I've really enjoyed your work so far, some other stories give me day and nightmares the content is so disgusting but your stuff feels great, I had to go mid way through and the whole time I was gone I thought about the story and couldn't wait to get back to read.

By far the best mom-son adventure I have read on this site. Definitely a winner in all respects. Supercharged sex with no apparent hangups. Next time in Tennessee, I need an invitation. Great job, Author!

An awesome mom/ son love affair. Well written without being filthy.

Frog308

This is a perfect story set up especially when his friends at the university get ahold of his mom.

A well written read

love it, please write more.