All Comments on 'Mom Son Sex Tales Pt. 01'

the was terrible.

You are writing a story, not a script. Unless it's something such as a transcript, the

<character>: <character's dialogue>

format is NOT used in a story.

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Stories use a format such as the following.

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"Mom, please take it in your mouth and give me a blowjob," I said/

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Mom replied, "Shut up, idiot! I haven't done it even once. and I will never do it to you."

cannot wait for part 2

Initial story ?

Long way to go BUT - persevere, you have started withe an attempt at mom - son incost and barely got through.

Continue, try a sister, and aunt, a lady next door. The more you write the more comfortable you will become, with that, the better your stories will be.

"I was like" ??? Whatever happened to that perfectly good verb "to say" ?

Don't give up your day job.

Just terrible

Author has a second grade knowledge of spelling, syntax, and grammar…if that . Awful.